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03-08-05, 07:52 PM | #1 | |||||||
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the confrontation with the logics. was nothing more than a stress to find the right destination and if your lost.. just follow that subtle constellation ...i left it... right there as it lays in the sky. dying slowly. it gets a crazed look in its eye. short of breath time to expose the true demons for what they are. but for as far as we are we stil have so much farther. if we are to attain the meaning of forever. then i'm going to ask you to .. stop pause think about it before you release. close your lips for just a few seconds give it time to rest and make peace. that thought as it is caught between the battle of the heart and brain. is simply the thought process of a genius. but... make sure you understand fully . and that there is no room for mistake but still. its going to be so hard to relate. i can't fully comprehend if you don't make the suggestion its like coming up with a answer .. with no question but you . o dear sweet you as you stand there letting the wind take hold of your very spirit screaming so loud that even the angels will hear it. and still all my answers everything i have been on a quest for. is summed up when the angels stand beside me whispering softly telling me exactly what i need to hear for once in our lives i'll explain fear.
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03-08-05, 08:18 PM | #2 | |||||
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wow, this poem is dope in every sense of the word, your vocabulary is impeccable, and your words are wonderous, leaving me in awe...damn, i cant think of anything else to say except wow, keep dropping like that..1
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03-08-05, 08:32 PM | #3 | |||||||
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haha that whole thing was from the top of my head. i jus sat there and wrote hahahaha... but thanks... hey you wouldn't wanna do a spoken word collab? my last one was shit.. but i figured out and i'm gett'n better at it but yea pm me if your intrested
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03-09-05, 09:44 AM | #4 | ||||||
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yea this had really good vocab, structure was good. this was dope good emotion and imagery just a dope poem
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03-09-05, 11:52 AM | #5 | |||||
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this was dope, decent imagery for bein off the top of the head...and i loved how you conveyed everything....if you got time..check out my frst poem on here..."soul"
2 fingers 1 love
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03-09-05, 10:38 PM | #6 | |||||||
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thanks for the feed... drop a link if u want me to check anything
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