woah, now this was hard hitting. very indepth.

Where am I?
I stand-alone in this dark room, blinded by shade…
Cast here, trapped here, in this evil masquerade…
What’s going on? Where am I? Is this a dream?…
Could this be, heaven or hell? Or am I in-between?…
Trapped in my own thought, inside my own mind…
No option but to think, and try to find a sign…
Imprisoned in my own skull, stuck in this room…
So wide, yet so small, about to go crazy soon…
My fate to lay tranquil, my thoughts philosophical…
This just goes to show, that anything is possible…
^^^i like the questions that were bieng asked in this little part. very deep passionate questions that had such a great meaning to them.

The world is judged
Visual pictures of motion in front of me…
Support my philosophy, that this world is crazy…
People will believe anything they see on TV…
No one questions the system, and the pen is almighty…
Well pardon me, for thinking there shouldn’t be poverty…
Men claim to be religious, but refuse to give to charity…

We praise the American dream, but yet I’m still stuck…
Asking why a man would kill just to earn a few bucks…
^^^this is deep i like this line the most "Education is not what it should be, it should be… That poor kids can go to the same college as me…" this was very deep. showed that you care for others and not just yourself. very good.

Loss of my sanity
Now thoughts flood my skull, drown my brain…
Lying back in pitch black, it’s fucking insane…
To think that our god would allow so much pain…
Hundreds dead everyday in the president’s name…
Ashamed, to see images of innocent people slain…
It’s not a game, so many people live life in vain…
So cut my veins, it seems suicide is a blessing…
Because I laugh when teachers give us moral lessons…
They say violence never solved anything, right?…
Yet they’ll recruit us and ship us to Iraq to fight

^^^o man, so much emtotion, this made my heart really feel what you feel. very nice lines bieng written, "They say violence never solved anything, right?… Yet they’ll recruit us and ship us to Iraq to fight…", damn so ill, very deep not complicated but very understanding.

Contemplating the conundrums of life
The world is shit, it’s as if no one has realized…
The world is filled with unconvinced feeble minds…
This wasn’t created to get a job, retire, then die…
I know there is much more that goes with this life…
But were brainwashed, to just live it how it is…
Instead of seeking a brighter future for our kids…
There is much more, so many mysteries to ponder…
It’s like I’m the only one who thinks, who wonders…
How the world might be if we lived it differently…
But were too scared, so we continue to pretend were happy…
^^^damn man, you have some deep as stuff here that is really really deep. "Instead of seeking a brighter future for our kids…
There is much more, so many mysteries to ponder…
It’s like I’m the only one who thinks, who wonders…
How the world might be if we lived it differently…
But were too scared, so we continue to pretend were happy…" these were the lines that made this poem come alive and speak to me personally. it sounds like you planned everything so ritely and it all fit into place well.

The Pieces come together
Were stuck thinking this is how life should be lived…
No one wants to question why were unprivileged…
If we would stop and look for a greater meaning to life…
Then maybe everyone would be able to live a paradise…
Yet we hate on one another, and no one blamed the government…
For categorizing us with races, country’s and continents…
And religion causes war to, God watches us and weeps…
Heading in the wrong direction, killing ourselves as we speak…
This black space has let me see the truth that I once would fear…
Lying blind in this dark room, things have never been more clear…
^^^damn this shit really speaks to me, this sounds like something TUPAC would say in one of his poems, its not intentially suppose to hurt ppl, but it does but in a good sense to were as this really touched me deep down. showed so much great emotion this has to be placed in the good books of people from this website. very good.

....................... feedback apreciated man, lol in all my poems, damn you drop a lot of feed foo'

well its only bcuz i understand poety, but stop doing dots in your other post and say thank you or w.e it is you say, but let the person know that you really appreciate it.

THANK YOU SO MUCH!!!!! Really though, thanks lol