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Old 04-15-10, 11:32 PM   #1
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prob best song i ever made

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tell me what u think lyrics r in da video
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Old 04-16-10, 01:14 PM   #2
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its ight not bad but flow is a little choppy at points
keep at it
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Old 04-17-10, 06:57 AM   #3
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hook was a little bit decent other than that u sound young,i guess the only thing positive thing was the hook, u kind of flowed with the beat,sounded kind of manotone, and sounds like u didnt dub your vocals,but overall no hate not to burst your bubble but wasnt feeling it..
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Old 04-18-10, 07:36 AM   #4
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some of the lines were noticably stretched out...i wasn't really consistantly feeling the flow in the verses too tough, i mean it sounds like with a bit of work you will definitely get better but just not quite there at the moment. the chorus was ok, that was probably the best part of the song. keep at it
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Old 04-18-10, 08:07 AM   #5
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