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L.I. 5 62.50%
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Old 07-05-04, 05:39 PM   #1
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(A.I) L.I. Vs DeLeon (BP)

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Old 07-05-04, 05:44 PM   #2
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Old 07-05-04, 07:52 PM   #3
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^^ Question why is the posts to vote like 550 p lol
 
Old 07-05-04, 08:04 PM   #4
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checkin....and becuz of herbs who dont know how to vote
 
Old 07-06-04, 02:57 AM   #5
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Old 07-08-04, 11:24 PM   #6
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This was more then a touch.. he left an impact indescribable…
He knew erything about me.. like he was straight inside of ya…
Couldn’t fool Jerry.. he always knew right from wrong…
If there was a problem.. he’d face it standing strong…
If we could all be an ounce of what he was.. no harm would be done…
I think you get the point.. now here is how the tragedy begun…

Exams had ended.. and we anticipated the weekend eagerly…
Party party party.. nothing but straight up beer for me…
Jerry had found a party.. already knew I was down for it…
The keg was caked.. me and Jerry went out to get more shit…
The night tragically changed.. as we left the liquor store…
Got held up by a stranger.. violence would get hardcore…
Told us to give him our stash.. but Jerry would have that…
Laughed and said ‘fuck off’.. till the cat pulled a gat…
My heart froze.. this shit wasn’t a joke I gave Jerry a nudge…
Told him to hand over the liquor.. but Jerry wouldn’t budge…
Come on man.. Serious was the only mood the moment had…
If he’d just give him the bag.. the ending might not be sad…

The guy grabbed the bag.. turned around and began to run…
But suddenly stopped.. seemed like he wanted to have fun…
Twisted around and grinned.. my thoughts were paralyzed…
Anticipated misfortune.. I couldn’t even blink my eyes…
He pulled the gun out of his pocket.. and then pointed forward…
Aimed the gun at me.. Tried to move but the requests were ignored…
3 Seconds felt like years.. then I heard a bang in my ears…
I’m leveled to the ground.. Bein shot don’t hurt like it appears…
I hear a cough.. next thing I wondered why Jerry was on the ground…
I didn’t have a wound.. then I knew Jerry had pushed me down…

Man you saved my life.. theres no words that can repay you…
I know if it happened again.. this time I would save you…

R.I.P. Jerry Lyles
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Old 07-08-04, 11:26 PM   #7
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World Leaders Are In A Meeting.......

*Everyone is Arguing *

but Iraq and America the most

Iraq: Fuck you...get your people out
U.S: Fuck you! you need us
Both: We'll fucken nuke you


*A voice fades in*

*the room fades to silence*


My name is Nicholas Berg...and I was sent to this earth
To go to heaven, not HELL………..but I went to it first
……For somethin that I didn't deserve
……I was hit with a curse of havin biblical birth
……In a land of unforgiven sin and cyclical hurt
And so it’s only right I dig up dirt on YOUR soil n’ hit a nerve
…Achievin peace n’ love you risk ya ass to, find it in the midst of scandal
Wind up on the history channel sliced up by this mystery panel
Secrets that could seize the day were leaked from my brain
Not in a MEANINGFUL way, but in this evil game
That I was found a pon in; now I’m gone indeed I play
This Angel form leads the way for what I need ta say,find the world better days
What’s SINFUL is the way human life has been portrayed ta get their way
……Cuz all they use us for is as an instrument of hate
Since the days of World War TWO...U.S you've fought the THIRD world
To…“expand your interests” at the cost of murdered little boys and girls

*Leaders: say their country*

I've heard the voice ‘n Iran…Guatemala, and Korea
…Panama, Greece…Ghana, Nam, and Indonesia
…In Laos……..Zaire……..Cambodia…Brazil
…In Bolivia…and Chile,
*Nick*
THIS is where ur known to kill
There are “covert operations” in Dominican Republic
Known by THE POPULATION, tho it’s HIDDEN from the PUBLIC!!
The SHIT these countries stomach tho…the Internet can publish
So yes they WILL acknowledge it….dismissing it as rubbish
Shit ya'll wanted just ta bomb Saddam, but in the month of Ramadan?
We’ll all have a Jihad-a-thon until Islam is gone is what you all are on!
U gotta choose what side ur on and find ur right from wrong
Or let them just decide for yall with Taliban John now C’MON!
How’s it hard…when all of you calculate every little route to take
BELIEVING you n’ me were deceived…because you don’t allow mistakes!
Ur now awake I hope…when WERE ya'll on the right track?
U.S fought our revolution you call this our war in Iraq
you want their oil they’ve nothing more than what they wear on their backs
…You’re ignoring the facts: their only choice is to fight BACK!
Iraq flipped their criminal acts into a cryptic attack
Substituting newer rules to reconfigure the map
Tit for tat, like our differences don’t SURVIVE the borders
…U can’t stop a oil fire with water, rival war defying order
WHEN did yall's kind…SUPPORT the fight of homicide with slaughter
Time before u we made SURE the poor that’s dyin shorter line the soil
Nine-eleven was done…as u guessed, because U.S is enemy one
But you countries can’t walk without ur head wit a gun
So ya'll correct your young; you never loved America once
But it’s NOT cuz their rich…it’s all the death that they've brung
That’s where *I* come in…you didn’t buy it people!! FINALLY u
Wizened up ta see through, realizing you ALL DEFINE the evil!!
I get deep TOO!…(sigh)…got deeper…than u wanna know
But I ain’t mean ta have my head took off my neck and on a show
I can joke NOW…but YA'LL DESTROY whole communitys!
I chose to show some unity, but my killers saw an opportunity
A good-son from the U.S…….BUTCHERED cuz he was Jewish!
If war support is sorta short…well how could they refuse THIS!
On-my-way HOOME home…ta mom and dad from waging peace
I was nabbed by…and trapped by these Iraqi police
So begins the magic…I was handed off to terrorists
COACHED by u Americans! u want a link? well THERE it is!
U STILL say you wont back down? Al Quaida’s in Iraq now!
And always been! so keep ur eyes on THEM and off my cash cow
An’ THAAAT’S how they do it n’ why it was done
…Don’t feel !BAD! I’d RATHER dyin’ by that knife than a gun
If there’s a reason that ur eyes should run, cry for ME none
Feel for my parents though…u know they’ll always side with their son
Because
…The media’s in their hands, but if the bad of what surrounds me
Gets out then I’ll be tied to Zacarias Moussaui
My parents grapple-with…fight the feds an’ THEN be left defendin me
……DO THEMSELVES or let you ALL ENEMY shit on my memory
hear my words.....put them deep into your heart like an ocean
your fates are open, to put this world back into its proper motion

*voice fades*

*room is quiet*

 
Old 07-09-04, 12:04 AM   #8
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Nice battle you guys.. both were very good

L.I:i was feeling this.. you hit home with that..i was feeling this quite a bit.. the flow was just a tad choppy, but it was still decent.. had good emotions..i could picture it in my mind.. kept it simple, and sweet.. which is a nice style.. id give the verse a 8.1 out of ten..


deleon: hmm.. i dont think i was feeling this as much.. it was pretty extended, and the topic wasnt as genuine.. it was a good verse, and the political depth of it, was pretty impressive.. its kind of hard comparing two different approaches to a topic, both saw it so differently.. i would give your verse a 7.8.. i still liked it, except on the length was my only prob with it.. nice verse..

i have to give my vote to L.I.. he took it.. felt his take on the topic a lil bit more..good battle you guys..

yea, if oyu guys feel like it, oyu can just return a vote to either one of my battles.. i got one with trase in EFL thats a topical, or the one with restricted.. i'll soon have a battle with L.E commin saturday.. aight.. good battle again
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Old 07-09-04, 08:13 AM   #9
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/\ hoops wtf dawg this was better than was made out. L.I nice subject sounded real deep nice useage of words and decent flow to ur rhyme if that was true dawg then that was a real hero there puttin his life out there for ya...gotta appreciate that coz not many would do the same. I ws feelin this very much props to you on the subject.

However DeLeon touched a raw nerve in his verse got the bigger picture because every1 is involved in his subject which was quite well structured and also had decent wordplay and rhyming even though he aint directly involved, the world IS involved in the war in Iraq and is a touchy subject but De handled it well which is why my vote goes to you.

V/DeLeon
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Old 07-09-04, 08:22 AM   #10
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^AGREED.. i did kind of forget to give you guys props for two dope ass verses..was to focused to on figuring out which one i like dbetter.. both gave great effort,a nd had really good drops.. big up to both of you... *stops freeposting*
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Old 07-09-04, 10:50 AM   #11
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Aight...Check It...I Ain't Poleing..

LI: 8/10
Nice Drop. Your Structure Is Off In Topicals But Your Flow Was Aight. The Emotion You Put Into This Subject Was Felt But Your Subject Material Not All There. Nice Drop But Not Your Best.

DeLeon: 9/10
Nice Drop...Your Flow Was On Point and The Subject and View Points Was Hot. Emotion Was Mos Def Towards The Middle To End. Vocab Was Nice...Just All Around Great Drop.

Good JOb To Both Of Ya!

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Old 07-09-04, 12:45 PM   #12
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shit
LI: your shit was good but you lacked vocab and your flow was off at times and the ending ruined the whole thing cause it didnt really make sense

I know if it happened again.. this time I would save you…


^ how if he's dead...LOL
but anywayz your imagenery was pretty good 7.5/10
your vocab lacked 5/10
your structure was alright 6.5/10
your wordplay was pretty bad too 6.5/10
your multi's..didnt really see any 5/10
meta's none were used 0/10

Deleon: your verse had much better vocab and wording...and structure was better
imagenry it was decent 7.5/10
your wordplay was good 8/10
multi's were good 7.5/10
meta's i didnt really see any 0/10
structure was good 8/10
vocab was excellent 8.5/10

overall: vote: Deleon

that was real hot
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Old 07-09-04, 02:30 PM   #13
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L.I.-You came Hott and Focused and Structure was decent...Similies was in
there and lil bit...So was Metaphores and Constincy was there a little
leaving balance a stabled and easy Enjoyably Topical

Deleon-Hot hot..You devided them up and the structure was hott
and giving balance good and easy to read and Very aight imaginery
and stayed there alot and I liked it very Much in it

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Old 07-09-04, 02:37 PM   #14
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aight fo some reason it aint lettin voters poll....so 3-1
 
Old 07-09-04, 05:43 PM   #15
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uppin just drop your vote and try to poll if it doesnt work strobe will poll it..
 
 


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