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01-28-05, 01:46 PM
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Drama Queen vs Anxiety (HeavyWeight Championship)
IP: D5FE 7245
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Battles Go Up Friday Check In Due Sunday By 11:59 PM Eastern Time Verses Due Tuesday By 11:59 PM Eastern Time Voting Ends Thursday By 11:59 PM Eastern Time 20 Lines Minimum 40 Lines Maximum No Biting No Recycling Do Not Go Over The Line Limit Or Under The Line Limit Meaning No Less Than 20 Lines No More Than 40 Lines You Must Vote On 3 Battles Per Week And Edit Them Into Your Check-In.. If You Dont Do So, Youre Banned From The Tourney The Following Week Topic: Life and Death
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01-28-05, 02:23 PM
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Odi et Amo
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IP: B16B 0FE9
Okiedokie, g'luck Anxiety, should be a good battle!
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01-28-05, 05:28 PM
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IP: 6CB8 12EC
Check..........
Goodluck DQ. |
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01-31-05, 01:06 PM
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Odi et Amo
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IP: A19F D079
My Truth Seeking for all the beauty in the world,its flaws as well as perfection Decisions made by natural selection,am questioning my own reflection What's the essence of our life if every being just gets born to die? On who should we rely if everything can be gone in the blink of an eye? Should always expect the unexpected but it's not death itself I fear What's the reason of my presence here if I'm just bound to disappear? Obstacles are never forgotten,just like open wounds and aching scars Time is a luxury that is not ours,so little time to reach the stars Carpe diem,just live your life to the fullest and never stay at ease Take risks,never look back but what if there's nothing left to seize? What defines our chosen path,what on earth or above is worth dieing for? Our ability to adore or perhaps the desire for never-forgotten glore? Universe we created is a ruthless jungle where only the strong survive Isn't it naive to strive for something we believe will make us thrive? Haunted by the mystery of life and death which it shall never reveal Tryin to achieve the other's ideal,genuine emotions you gotta conceal This foolish existence,I don't wanna die but what's the point of living? We reach,we fall and many say they won't forget but what about forgiving? In fact,do we even exist or is this merely a past phase we reminisce? Because in the end...the truth is never simple and yet...it is DQ
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01-31-05, 06:30 PM
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IP: 6CB8 12EC
We take life for granted, when truly we know... Not a single one of us can choose when we go... Live to die, but dont we actually just die to live? If heaven is so much greater, why waste time with this? As babies, we're carefree and we sleep in a basket... Then grow up so one day we can sleep in a casket... A graveyard. Leaving some faggots afraid of death... 6 feet deep, rotten where maggots can taste ya flesh... What scares me, is the uncertainty of what lies beyond... What will be there to greet me when I am finally gone? Will heaven take my soul and only leave my carcass? Or will i be left alone, dead, to sleep in darkness? If i knew the answer, then i would hate what im given... Because i dont want anything, to change how im livin... Death is mystery. But it's not like life is simple... It's hard just to go a day, and truley not be sinfull... Taking a chance in life, might put you in a hearse... But to not take any chances, that is truthfully worse... Do what you want to, live your life to the fullest... You never know, tomorrow, you just might hit a bullet... |
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02-01-05, 01:04 AM
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As Seen On T.V.
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IP: 5867 FD83
vote: anxiety
best lines: If i knew the answer, then i would hate what im given... Because i dont want anything, to change how im livin... the imagery was good, the flow was perfect. struct was good, i dont see anything wrong with your key, it was keen. congrats. DQ i also ejoyed yours, i was just feeling anxiety's lines a bit more on this one. both good verses. going with anxiety. |
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02-01-05, 09:37 PM
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IP: B6FE 019D
Bad topic..too general
..Drama Queen.. It was a good drop...nothin really stood out to me as overly amazing or anything it was good though dont get me wrong...emotional good structure it read well the imagery was ok it was a decent drop.. 7/10 ..Anxiety.. As babies, we're carefree and we sleep in a basket... Then grow up so one day we can sleep in a casket... ---this line had good imagery but the rhyming seemed forced ok this peice was good i mean it was short and sweet right to the point...it had really good imagery to it good structure..the choice of vocab isnt what i woodnt have used, but thats nothing to hold agaisnt you everyone has theyre own style.. ...I only brought up those two lines because it was the only part of the peice i didnt like 8.5/10 both had good peices there wasnt much wrong with either but anxiety had better iamgery more emotion to it (in my opinion of course) props to both..I hope to see more from both sides in the future and Id also like to face the winner..not for any kind of title shit u kno just pur fun |
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02-02-05, 12:31 AM
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Life is a Constant Battle
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IP: 404C 71FB
vote goes to Anxiety...
quite a different approach from both of yall not that much emotion except one was first person(Anxiety) and one was kinda a informative on death(Drama)vote was really close but i gotta go with anxiety because it was first person it had a little more emotion but that was it id say a .5 better than Drama Drama liked your piece how you used imagery, emotion, and good vocab kinda telling the reader about life and death, you also gave the reader some insight on what to do...but i think it was lacking the emotion because you took this view...good vocab n structure... 7/10 favorite line : Obstacles are never forgotten,just like open wounds and aching scars Time is a luxury that is not ours,so little time to reach the stars Anxiety liked your piece alittle better because it was first person and had a little more emotion...you had good imagry, structure, n vocab...You kinda belittled death as a topic expressin your opinion liked that but it coulda used a little more complexity...good job i gave ya a 7.5/10 favorite line: What scares me, is the uncertainty of what lies beyond... What will be there to greet me when I am finally gone?
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02-02-05, 12:42 AM
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IP: 5671 DBDD
Live to die, but dont we actually just die to live?
If heaven is so much greater, why waste time with this? ^^dope dope dope line anyways this was a good ass battle for real dq has tepped up but not good enough i personally do think anixety is the top 3 topical writers on rv ive seen and thats word this was no exception both came at the topic with good imagery and nice vocab good flow also to both real nice but the emotion and just rawness os anixetys won this in my opion shit was dope as fuck in emotion and thats gave him it in my opion. vote-aniety
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02-02-05, 01:00 AM
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IP: 6CB8 12EC
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=174409
First link. http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=174404 Second link. Last edited by anxiety : 02-02-05 at 01:07 AM. |
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02-02-05, 02:35 PM
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Light Weight
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IP: 6FA7 7304
v/ Anxiety...
Drama, I really think with your ideas you could have taken this, if the lines weren't to stretched. Liked the approach and everything you were sayin through out the piece, but it was hard to read along sometimes. Anxiety, nice piece man, really liked it about even with Drama's, but I was just able to read it more smoothly and just made the piece better overall. Best lines... Drama: In fact,do we even exist or is this merely a past phase we reminisce? Because in the end...the truth is never simple and yet...it is Anxiety: Live to die, but dont we actually just die to live? If heaven is so much greater, why waste time with this? |
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02-02-05, 04:48 PM
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Odi et Amo
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IP: 5ECE 799B
Guess it's quite obvious who won this...Props to you, it's no shame losing to one of best on here. Will edit this with votes as soon as possible!
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02-03-05, 11:49 AM
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Odi et Amo
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IP: 858D 1ED8
Can't edit my posts so I'll just post em like this...
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=174405 http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=174407 DQ
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02-03-05, 04:17 PM
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~Break Bred or Play Dead~
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IP: D135 D6AF
Queen-
U had a nice drop here ma..but u can work on expressing your self better try 2 use words that no one else would exspect you to put there your emotion was good..but dont focus on u so much try 2 throw diff life and death scenarios in there..so it can cover the whole topic..dont jus use words like "I" cuz thats jus focuseing on u try 2 put it from another persons point of view or tell the story of someone else Anxiety nice ass drop...u didnt focus jus on u ..u used a broad range of ideas asked questions...replied 2 those questions and moved on with the topic u had nice wordplay and imagery..when u can see in your head what they are talkin about then u kno its good imagery...you had nice emotion sumthin i need 2 work on...overall this was a close battle but u edged her out bye a few *Nuff Said*
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02-03-05, 08:29 PM
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IP: D5FE 7245
imagery-none, didnt sense any from both, they were both fully emotional verses in my opinion and didnt have imagery...or enough for me to notice
flow-Anxiety, not a lot of ajaxs verse was offcourse i only spotted 1 or 2 bars that the syllables didnt match up perfectly but it was always like 1 syllable off it wasnt nothing to be big about but drama had more because of her higher vocab...but from now on i dont consider vocab in my voting, you can put as much as you want or as little as you want...but if it messes up the flow its going to go against you and here it did a little but not too much you also had a descent flowing verse... beginning/end-Drama Queen, i liked the beginning of ajaxs verse but it felt too simple...now i know you dont use a big vocab and thats your style and it works great for you but this opener it just seemed too simple...the end was good also but i liked drama queens beginning and ending better...dramas beginning had a great wording that made it much more complex then anxietys opener...but the ending i liked because it gave an answer to question but flipped in 2 answers like that truth is never simple...and yet it is, i liked that a lot emotion-Drama Queen i guess this is what it boils down to... both had an extremely good amount of emotion this was the hardest aspect but i think drama pulled this off... what stood out in anxietys verse to me was the questions like... Live to die, but dont we actually just die to live? If heaven is so much greater, why waste time with this? ^dopest bar of the whole verse in my opinion and this was what most of the verse was...but what happened was the verse was too short...if you brought more lines of this i would of gave you the vote but it was only 20 and i thought drama had all the emotion packed into her 20...i think almost every single bar she had in her verse was like the one in your verse and dramas was just dope with that from the beginning till end and left you thinking and it just had a stronger sense of emotion...overall vote Drama Queen this was a really good battle and even though my vote wont count since its like 5-1 i just thought id drop anyway... peace
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