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http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=240905
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Writecha your rhymes are so flat, so crap, head must B.. small
I could pump your head full of air & you still couldn't spit.. ball
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Listen dawg, were both in college..... for one reason or another
Your school... that for sinkin balls in nets, or stuffin em into rubber?
Look, fuck B-ball for a second, your schools for positive males diein & corrodin'
You got sick while surfin the net & caught a virus, cuz ya BF didn't wear a trojan.
Listen up lame, you should come to my school & play some hoops
Cause you can recycle lines here but ya can't recycle the 20 line jump shoots!
I will suffocate you in plastic, cover your whole face in it & laugh kid, infact
Your average, all up in surranwrap, fire the masscot, you look more like it lad
Bein a baller... you gotta lay down the fuckin mack, girls love ballers dicks
So give me a holler... when your actually able to make the ball & rim stick
You play no role bitch, fuck ya click, fuck ya school USC, sit down < it's irrelevent
Gabe Pruitt, Lodrick Stewart & Nick Young, only decent ones,
.................................................. ................ ya more important benched
If ya aren't mauled through, the games like traffic son, look both ways & more
I've heard of people catchin the ball, but in the face! lookin like orange poures
Now I'll end this where it hurts, sorry to ruin your manhood, it was reffs call
Cause I don't even need to low blow you, to cause traffic, holding your ball!

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there's a couple things that differentiate us here, 1. we run the court
2. ppl can name our players 3. they had to google yours
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ima copy your style and beat you at your own game
ya showed me ya numbers, makin it easier to beat a no name
you guys won the title back in 39, still think thats somethin
it just reminds you that it's been 68 long years of sucking
can't u see man, you're a lame duck and i'll see your girl later
only ass you touch, is hopin off the bench slappin other players
Tebo, who the fuck is this clown..ain't no 1 who thinks less than
ya lines is like your roster, there really ain't that many freshman
the ducks are fuckin queers, so it's evident you'll be dead soon
cuz runnin the backdoor is for zone's, not in ya homie's bedroom
admitt it tho, ya love the cock.. and frankly it's quite creepy
cuz Tebo won't be the only no name comin out like John Amachei
it's hopeless, and bein named after a disney team must really hurt, wow..
they were thinkin of makin D4 but even Emelio turned the shit down

fuck your 18

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tebo-wasnt feelin opener or closer but in between was pretty good...some lines werent very strong but some others made up for it...only other thing i see wrong is that some stuff seems forced...even tho the lines were long, flow still went good

out-good opener and closer but in between wasnt as strong....stayed on the gay subject too long, his was relevant since youre the trojans but ducks really dont have much t do with sex lol...but this verse was still decent

close battle

v/tebo

Tebo - He sorta swayed tho not really, u retorted, it all evens out, so just don't make any more comments guys or I'll delete them too.

You play no role bitch, fuck ya click, fuck ya school USC, sit down < it's irrelevent
Gabe Pruitt, Lodrick Stewart & Nick Young, only decent ones,
.................................................. ................ ya more important benched

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there's a couple things that differentiate us here, 1. we run the court
2. ppl can name our players 3. they had to google yours
the ducks are fuckin queers, so it's evident you'll be dead soon
cuz runnin the backdoor is for zone's, not in ya homie's bedroom
it's hopeless, and bein named after a disney team must really hurt, wow..
they were thinkin of makin D4 but even Emelio turned the shit down

Okay, honestly I didn't think this was that close. Out didn't have much that I'd say was top punch worthy, but was pretty consistent with 3 alright quotables and a few other lines that weren't bad either. Tebo, only thing u had was that roster punch and even that wasn't worded well. Out was much more direct about his opponent, Tebo u came too generic really and all ur stuff was awkwardly worded. See if u can make ur lines shorter and get to the point quicker, ur stuff just beats around the bush. Keep workin' at it and u can always ask me for feed on verses if u want it. But for this, I'd say Out got it kinda easy.

Vote - Out Writechas

Tebo had a lot of stretched punches with bad wording. I couple okay concepts but, the wording just killedddd it. Not hating or anything but nothing wasd really worth quoting.


there's a couple things that differentiate us here, 1. we run the court
2. ppl can name our players 3. they had to google yours
can't u see man, you're a lame duck and i'll see your girl later
only ass you touch, is hopin off the bench slappin other players
Tebo, who the fuck is this clown..ain't no 1 who thinks less than
ya lines is like your roster, there really ain't that many freshman
the ducks are fuckin queers, so it's evident you'll be dead soon
cuz runnin the backdoor is for zone's, not in ya homie's bedroom
^Those were all Straight by outwrite. Pretty consistent verse throughout

v/out

You play no role bitch, fuck ya click, fuck ya school USC, sit down < it's irrelevent
Gabe Pruitt, Lodrick Stewart & Nick Young, only decent ones,
.................................................. ................ ya more important benched

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there's a couple things that differentiate us here, 1. we run the court
2. ppl can name our players 3. they had to google yours
the ducks are fuckin queers, so it's evident you'll be dead soon
cuz runnin the backdoor is for zone's, not in ya homie's bedroom




VOTE = OUT WRITECHAS

tebo.. like i've been telling other people.. be more direct and make it wittier.. write.. lol @ the 68 line.. decent shit..
vote out.

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Tebo, once again your tryin to hard. Just think more about what your writin. You had good concepts, but nothin came out strong. Personals punches could have been better if you worked more on wordplay. overall eh verse from you.


Out-nothin real special about your verse either. A couple things showed potential, but just like tebo. you have to word your lines better. You as well have potential. keep it up, and i see you ellevatin.

v. out.

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