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Old 01-21-05, 04:56 PM   #1
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Given Light Vs. Hells Fire

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Battles Go Up Friday
Check In Due Sunday By 11:59 PM Eastern Time
Verses Due Tuesday By 11:59 PM Eastern Time
Voting Ends Thursday By 11:59 PM Eastern Time

20 Lines Minimum
40 Lines Maximum

No Biting
No Recycling
Do Not Go Over The Line Limit Or Under The Line Limit
Meaning No Less Than 20 Lines No More Than 40 Lines

You Must Vote On 3 Battles Per Week And Edit Them Into Your Check-In.. If You Dont Do So, Youre Banned From The Tourney The Following Week


Topic: Judicial System
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Old 01-21-05, 08:01 PM   #2
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Oh the new battles are up? That was quick flow?

Well checking in.

I'm not no-showing this time.
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Old 01-23-05, 05:10 PM   #3
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checkin in

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checkin in..good luck to the kat at the other side of the battle i expect this to be a good battle im goin into criminology so gonna have some vocab
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Old 01-25-05, 09:54 PM   #4
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Judicial System

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Intro

Eyelids open showing fuzzy blue, pigs shakle the dizzy dude
I feel nauseated this isnt koo, worried not know what to do
I roll over into my own puke, roll back like i was hittin da juke
Officer laughs askin what i took, reportin a rape that i was in book
Tried to remember but couldnt think Miranda and wasnt Wayne-right
New law but couldnt form insanity because my girlfriend died.
Gravity hit eyes heavy so i cried, mind blocked out the drunken fight
Starting from begining for Alliby, sat with fingers on eyes, oh- why
We consumed alcohol like infected wounds, just got over fight n ruin
She kissed me on the neck said come to my room, intercoarse hit rubbin poon
Was done she cum then heard get off me n boom, boyfriend of coarse in room
Shot girlfriend and called cops to shoot himself at noon, no witness no goon

Judicial system
Cops caught me a block away, sirens sound mixed with bloods terror fray
Pleaded innocent cops nothing to say, shouldnt a ran looks like old O.J.
Judge restated my rights i might have lost, and left a bail that no one post
Cold steel made cage made Bubba boss, wanted anal sex punched him n lost
Cried self to sleep bitin pillow and butt floss, told injustice to officer said toss
Lawyer lied way outta crime, sayin efficent evidence never met time
Jury was delivered by bias bind, Hopin god please have mercy this time
The girl was a daughter of high money kind, father tried to buy the jury, fined
Nerves were out like play review on rewind, water fell from gravity made shine
Turned rose hoped for grace from powers that bind, jury said no guilty, sighed
however, rape was still case n i got five, jury said she fifteen that bitch lied
Went to corrections found way to survive, hid in corners and open night eyes
never shower almost got guted few times, inmates hear rape n droppin guys
Beatin unconscious doctor saved my life, few seconds later never make five
Fourth year gone more like war day by day, stabed kid for attackin with plate
rather be higher level can sleep without devil, count days with head on swivel
got 24 hrs left no advil, head hurts, hope these toons dont drop the anvil
sittin by self at table, having pankakes, surup poisoned dont look like maple


Outro
Talked to governor asked for pardon, laughed like i farted beg u pardon
Left like animal hopin huntin stop, wardon...racing heart barily winnin Gordon
Got an hour left knew they waitin at door when, Sleepy passed a note to him
I have to last an hour on weightliften hours, run n hope the guard hits tower
So im rappin one last time, spittin one last time, hope judge reads next time
armageddon B.Wills gots to shine, go out fightin impossible battle Acilles dyin
Styx is reachin, left with money on eyes for reapin, want to die sleepin
Step outside Bubba charges with knife and cop snipes his life
Blood hits face justice came that night, walked out smiling free tomorrow free tonight...
All belongings gone new life, wake up lemmings real life, death canceled flight tonight...

yo i had this done at 9:00 my time give me a break
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Old 01-25-05, 09:56 PM   #5
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40 lines outta do was kinda a quick drop didnt think it was that good hope ya like it
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Old 01-25-05, 10:12 PM   #6
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my links jeah

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one
.K.onflicts vs d-ception

waitin for peeps to battle come on kids
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Old 01-26-05, 11:33 AM   #7
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Sorry I no-showed, I don't have a legit excuse I suppose. Except for finals. Seriously though, I apolagize.
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Old 01-26-05, 11:41 AM   #8
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Whyte Ave vs Denied Truth

three
Mista Ath3entiq vs final

some one critique this shit man i know i didnt drop a verse for nothin, man no shows are str8 killin da league i had to basically look over one battle and critique two pieces
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Old 01-26-05, 01:47 PM   #9
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nice drop. wasnt neccasary.

but thats tough luck that you (Hells Fire) won
by no show, becuase that gives you less points
and this is no tourney, its a league. so points
matter, but what can you do about that?

good luck with the tourney.

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Old 01-26-05, 03:28 PM   #10
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Goes to Hells Fire of course due to no-show...

Let me give you some feedback though...first thing I thought when I saw your verse: daaaaaamn, this is fucking long! But I started reading anyway, expecting it to be dull as fuck but you managed to keep me focussed throughout the whole thing! (big props for that). Liked your approach, vocab was nicely balance between complex and basic and was feeling the flow. Had nice emotion in there and also good imagery...

Sorry for this no-show man, sucks big time indeed!

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Old 01-26-05, 11:15 PM   #11
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thanks to all yall for the feedback and pumped for my next topical
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Old 01-26-05, 11:56 PM   #12
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Nice to see you got feed on this, but yes you win by no show which sucks cause you only get 3 points...

But don't bitch to me every battle i have ever had in this league has been a no-show.
 
 


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