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Old 01-06-10, 03:45 PM   #1
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Old 01-11-10, 07:40 PM   #2
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uppin cuz i added the zshare link and no one likes me
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Old 01-11-10, 10:53 PM   #3
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Old 01-12-10, 05:22 AM   #4
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listening, not sure but pretty sure your spittng lil waynes verse with his vocals turned down lower then yours..unoriginal,he already spit that,common man,only positive thing about this track is your emotion..no hate but wack, your own written shit was alright.no offence but u gotta get off lil wang's dick..no hate.hes really not that sick.even he said he doesnt think about his lyrics most the shit he said he writes is just off the top of his head..hes wack.ive def heard better shit from u though.
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Old 01-12-10, 12:51 PM   #5
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i dont have waynes vocals under me, i just used his flow and concepts and put my opinion into what he was talkin about, i did the same thing at the begining of em's part where he kinda keeps waynes flow then i do my own shit in eminems part because i didn't agree with what he was talkin about at all really cuz he wasn't sayin anything important and i wanted to show my own flow rather than try to keep em's flow, which i could of but i wanted to be a little more original than that.
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wayne definately put thought into his lyrics on this and thats why i spit on his concepts, but i feel differently about the things he was talkin about, and i used his flow because it makes the words really obvious and i wanted to show my point of view and opinion on the same shit wayne was talkin about.
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like even my first line wayne says i got hate in my heart, love in my mind. and i say i got hate in my mind and love in my heart. that little change of words is a completely different way of lookin at the world compared to wayne, and i did that because i don't agree wit what wayne said cuz i'd never have hate in my heart cuz that goes against what i believe.
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idk, i put alot of thought into my lyrics and i think wayne did to. topics like talkin about your soul and the world in general your lyrics need to be very deliberate
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Old 01-13-10, 02:43 AM   #6
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no offence but by the standerds of alot of people that would be called biting..just my opinion and honestly probly others as well.
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Old 01-16-10, 09:00 PM   #7
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no offense but your opinion doesn't matter on this topic. i'm biting the flow on his song on purpose because he purposely made it slow and deliberate so u listen to his words, so i dilibrately did the same so people would listen to my words aswell. w/e basically just uppin
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Anywho....its almost horrible to say, but you do wayne no justice



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holy fuck. This is garbage. I tried my best to say somthing positive.
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garbageeeeeeeeeee

man just quit
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hes actually not a bad rapper its just this song.
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i use to like this song! but no

the chorus sounds wack sounds like u biting at parts man be creative make ur own shit up..... be diffrent
ur chorus sounds mono....................
sounds like u spitting lil wayne verse lmao tkaing alll his words den chorus again... wtf
wack

u dont sound like em stop trying to be like him

back to churs em aain gayyyyyyyyyyyy
dosnt sound good

it ends geatness it ended
2nd verse
ok u kinda came diffrent da diddy thing didnt feel but fdiffrent so ok ...better
2nd verse better cause u doing ur thing
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hes actually not a bad rapper its just this song.


stop, turn around 180 degrees, walk away.

yes he is a bad rapper man lmfao
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Old 01-19-10, 04:23 PM   #14
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stop, turn around 180 degrees, walk away.

yes he is a bad rapper man lmfao

this coming from someone that doesn't rap
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Old 01-19-10, 04:30 PM   #15
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i use to like this song! but no

the chorus sounds wack sounds like u biting at parts man be creative make ur own shit up..... be diffrent
ur chorus sounds mono....................
sounds like u spitting lil wayne verse lmao tkaing alll his words den chorus again... wtf
wack

u dont sound like em stop trying to be like him

back to churs em aain gayyyyyyyyyyyy
dosnt sound good

it ends geatness it ended
2nd verse
ok u kinda came diffrent da diddy thing didnt feel but fdiffrent so ok ...better
2nd verse better cause u doing ur thing


i wanted to talk about the same things that wayne did thats why i took the hook, i could of just used a wayne accapella for the hook, but that wouldn't of worked but u wouldn't of hated and it woulda sounded gay that way.
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do u know how mixtapes work? wayne steals hooks all the time, and i'm not on his dick i just agree wit the hook here, its touching on a topic that i could relate to, that topic being that this world is make believe and if the trueth about whats goin on in it would crush peoples heads, thats why wayne is goin to jail, because of he new shit like this talkin about real shit. and thats why biggy and 2pac got shot cuz they talked about stuff that people in power don't want people to know.
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whatever i'm talkin to a wall, ya'll wouldn't be able to make that song any better than me, theres only three people on this site anymore that record on the regular anyway so your opinion doesn't matter either
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and JTR hit me wit a diss track if i'm so wack u homo thug
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