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Black Queen has ACCEPTED this battle on 06-03-05 05:28 PM.

Lay-Text has ACCEPTED this battle on 06-03-05 05:40 PM.

vocal chords spit flames, deep words through profound lips bathe
a revolutionary sound fit & made of merry-go-round flipped plays
about a sick plague, spoken free without mics, a sort of precision
going back to old times, like anarchy, it wasnt born with a system
s'like i reformed a tradition, of hip hop & writin through the years
and if ya wonderin if god exists, be prepared, cause proof is here
dont need a crew to fear, may not be the best- im the only one
and i know you rappers spit fake, through plastic phony tongues
so i'll unmask the puns, reveal the golden pen n pad on ma shelf
still mad at myself, but the scriptures i hold a shit-bag of wealth

im approachin to take it, a univeral motion to stake this
i spit verses with jesus, then go play a game of poker with satan
hopin to rake in- loot, and a holy sum of profit, see
BQ gonna put on one hell of a show, n son, thats the prophecy
your thoughts are weak, they wont phase my scheme
your mind will get the seed of doubt, when i misplace ya dreams
put my spirit in writing, and man its true, i plan to use
wouldnt sell my soul now...only cuz i know what it can produce

then i shown my work to da lord, but he was bored what i wrote
fuck..i took a long path, now i'll stab myself with the fork in the road
but before i had spoke, pureness did' i was shocked at the instance
i felt all the light swept away, then sighted darkness in the distance
i was thrwart n imprisoned, i fucked myself on a little promise
now id sell my soul to lucifer, but not even he's bidding on it

Guess it goes wit da topic goodluck

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nice...........feeling it. i liked tha scenery detail tha most, but i was also feeln yo imagination. strong consistent drop.
r-rated: u had a nice drop. strong vocab, good imagination. this one is close........

uppin for Livin' Legendz

uppin nice drop Rated.............................

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Voted For: Lay-Text

Aii This IS what I Think

Lay-Text
Aii Man I Think That Your imagery was great in this topical all Though I Wasnt really feelin The topic LOL But Hey I wasnt battlin so I really cant say notihing about it basically you came and you dropped some deep feelings and emotions in this topical and You also hade a really good storyline and your didnt force your storyline with subtitles and stuff like that which shows that you are really good at what you do so Ima give you my vote in this battle .........Nice drop

BQ
Aii gurl You dropped good also except that I couldnt really follow your storyline all that to well No Offense your a great topical writer you have some great work bcuz ive seen it b4 but in this certain battle you didnt supply such a good storyline as usaul so I couldnt give you my vote this time so im sorry ........i jus wasnt feelin it this time

RTF In Any Battle link in my SIg HONESTLY

Voted For: Lay-Text

wow, lmfao, nice closer i was feelin the personal take...
couple really effective bars n none that got me bored shit was nice to read, solid drop. you stayed on topic n did it well..nice drop
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BQ-, i liked alot of ya lines that stayed on topic n i feel if you had gone up against some1 that doesnt write as well as lay text in topicasl form you wouldve pulled away with the win
but you had your verse stray away from the topic which was a huge disadvantage...try not to ramble on (middle verse)
nontheless i liked your closer, it was a koo thought...

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i'll play on ya consience, ya contents is complete nonsense
speak of biting, then you fucks flip everyone of my damn concepts
what the fuck, was you high..?
did you think i wouldn't recognize lines that i made
then you come up some bullshit tryna prove that im gay...!
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fake fucks..move on...!

Voted For: Lay-Text

Imagery: Both of you guys had amazing imagery to me... this was a really close battle... im goign to have to give the imagery to black queen... her piece just pained a picture in my mind more as the story progressed...

Emotion: Once again a close catagory... Queen you had good emotion but it fell off in places while on the other hand Lay's was more put together and his was more felt then yours

Structure: Bother had amazing structure so this is a tie

Creativity: I liked the way that Lay worked his story on the topic and was just more creative with his story... Queen you had a good aproach aswell it just fell short

Vote: Lay Text

No hate to either of you both good talented writers and i would love to battle you guys some time

Voted For: Lay-Text

v/lay text

black queen
has beutiful flow and vocab,the imagery was quite vivid, with some decent emotion,however it just seemed you werent that far on topic....i felt you could have done a better job with this,however dont get me wrong i think ytou are quite a good writer.....keep your head up

laytext
the emotion was strong in this piece you connected your words with the reality of hip hop nicely,the flow was decent, you had a more creative aproach to the topic,and i just felt you came more better and on a more real basis

overall both great pieces and worth the read, however for the following reasons

my vote goes to Lay-Text

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