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12-30-03, 02:55 PM | #1 | ||||||
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Dare
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Dare to push your way out of your mother`s womb;
Dare to do your very best until the day they lay your tomb; Dare to live a full life in between; Dare to dream the impossible dream. Dare to learn how to walk undaunted by the fact that you might fall; Even if you fall learn from your mistake and dare to try some more; Dare to grow out of your mother`s craddling arms; Dare to bring your boisterous temper to a calm. Dare to find yourself a life long friend; Dare to love her until the very end; Dare to be loyal and faithful to her; Dare to ignore that fleshly stir; Dare to love her with all your heart; Treat her like a queen, respect her, be smart! Dare to leave your parent`s house; With a well chosen bride to be your spouse; Dare to start again that orbit around the earth; As you announce to this world your child`s birth. In case, my brothers, you didn't see my plan; I am saying dare, dare to be a MAN! |
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12-30-03, 03:01 PM | #2 | ||||||
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IP: F90D 94D3
It has the word Dare in it too many times! Buy a thesarus!
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12-30-03, 03:01 PM | #3 | ||||||
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IP: B910 8CBB
On Topic, Very Very Good Vocabulary... Nice Overall Poem and Deep
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01-03-04, 09:42 PM | #4 | ||||||
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IP: 9ECF 685B
i LOVE the use of the word Dare. its like a challrnge to the audience to get out there. NICE
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01-05-04, 09:21 AM | #5 | |||||||
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I agree, I love the repetition of the word dare also. It was almost like a voice getting louder in my ears.. Becoming more frenzied and feverous in its pitch.. Actually Daring the reader to do these things. Brilliant.
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01-05-04, 10:20 AM | #6 | ||||||
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Don't listen to fuckin oddpants- What the fuck? That's the point.....you had.....how many "dares" in that? How many different words for "dare" is there? Probably not 15 of them. I thought is was pretty good. I think sometimes we need to state the obvious because people tend to forget what really matters. Good job.
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