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Old 12-30-03, 02:55 PM   #1
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Dare

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Dare to push your way out of your mother`s womb;
Dare to do your very best until the day they lay your tomb;
Dare to live a full life in between;
Dare to dream the impossible dream.

Dare to learn how to walk undaunted by the fact that you might fall;
Even if you fall learn from your mistake and dare to try some more;
Dare to grow out of your mother`s craddling arms;
Dare to bring your boisterous temper to a calm.

Dare to find yourself a life long friend;
Dare to love her until the very end;
Dare to be loyal and faithful to her;
Dare to ignore that fleshly stir;
Dare to love her with all your heart;
Treat her like a queen, respect her, be smart!

Dare to leave your parent`s house;
With a well chosen bride to be your spouse;
Dare to start again that orbit around the earth;
As you announce to this world your child`s birth.

In case, my brothers, you didn't see my plan;
I am saying dare, dare to be a MAN!

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Old 12-30-03, 03:01 PM   #2
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It has the word Dare in it too many times! Buy a thesarus!
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Old 12-30-03, 03:01 PM   #3
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On Topic, Very Very Good Vocabulary... Nice Overall Poem and Deep
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Old 01-03-04, 09:42 PM   #4
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i LOVE the use of the word Dare. its like a challrnge to the audience to get out there. NICE
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Old 01-05-04, 09:21 AM   #5
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I agree, I love the repetition of the word dare also. It was almost like a voice getting louder in my ears.. Becoming more frenzied and feverous in its pitch.. Actually Daring the reader to do these things. Brilliant.
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Old 01-05-04, 10:20 AM   #6
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Don't listen to fuckin oddpants- What the fuck? That's the point.....you had.....how many "dares" in that? How many different words for "dare" is there? Probably not 15 of them. I thought is was pretty good. I think sometimes we need to state the obvious because people tend to forget what really matters. Good job.
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