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08-24-06, 12:04 AM
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IP: 6C8E 873A
Had we never come across the vastness of pavement
The barrenness of waves and the grayness of the sea Never lost or ne'er been misguided We'd have ne'er reached seas so shining Or come from out of a hansom in Camden To a bar in the basement While all the while it rained Or come around to the friendliest of faces Handsomest in ugly places Or come from out of the tunnels we dig in To see that tunneling's not living And working doesn't work Or come to find that loving is labor Labor's life and life's forever Or come to see that keeping's not giving You get what you've given You get what you deserve And in the midst of all of the action Maybe only there found satisfaction Chasing sea-foam dreams Around another dirty old town Parallel run streams Toward the gray ocean from the green ground 'Oed und leer, das meer But look beneath the glassy surface All the songs you hear Down there they have a purpose All in all we cannot stop singing we cannot start sinking We swim until it ends They may kill and we may be parted But we will ne'er be broken hearted
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08-24-06, 12:08 AM
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IP: 6C8E 873A
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2824461
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2824463
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Was he robbed of the ashphalt that cushioned his face? Last edited by I Am Unreal. : 08-24-06 at 12:15 AM. |
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08-24-06, 04:59 AM
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IP: 9465 0DDF
Had we never come across the vastness of pavement
The barrenness of waves and the grayness of the sea Never lost or ne'er been misguided We'd have ne'er reached seas so shining Or come from out of a hansom in Camden To a bar in the basement While all the while it rained Or come around to the friendliest of faces Handsomest in ugly places Or come from out of the tunnels we dig in To see that tunneling's not living And working doesn't work Or come to find that loving is labor Labor's life and life's forever ^^ my FAV. lines your emotino was well done in her painted a nice image and that really helped me out in this poetic feel...the stroy was well well done1.....really creative i liked most of your lines aswell with that twist in plot shit. though some was kinda meh in wording but it didnt slow this dro pdown at all1....nice do my dude man you got this off well and never looked back AT ALL!
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