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Old 08-26-05, 03:59 PM   #1
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From His Point of View

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Thereís only so many sorries a mind can take
before a person falls down, stumbles and breaks.
It isnít worth all the pain Iíve had, all the things
Iíve went through just to get a piece thatís mad.
Canít understand the other side, just wanting
to get on a good tide.
Wonder at night is this really worth it, then in
the day I confirm it.
Still the things I put up with are insane, slanders
and her wanting me to change.
Little by little, I succumb to the wishes, little
by little I stop throwing switches.
Stuck in love, but canít find a way out, this
is my story of how one man canít shout.
Slowly falling and increasing in speed, never
going to tell you the things I need.
Physically enjoyable but mentally unstable,
I tell myself Iím willing and capable, but
some days like today its just too much for me
to handle.
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Old 08-26-05, 05:11 PM   #2
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wow, really emotional......felt this....ur vocab needs ta up...and ur structure.....an easy way out to make ur structure look iight is just center it.....lol and this had good concept 7.5/10...not bad......holla at my o/ms in tha sig
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Old 08-26-05, 05:20 PM   #3
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thanks man, uppin this
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Old 08-28-05, 11:24 PM   #5
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Old 08-29-05, 12:34 AM   #6
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this was good, but purely fiction, lol, emotion was good, flow was very good, structure is getting better, keep it up
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