u gotta keep ya head up even though thangs ain't right
u gotta keep ya head up alwayz try to put up a fight
u gotta keep ya head up even when times is hard
u gotta keep ya head up and put yo trust in da Lord

i'm a souljah by day and warrior by night/ i fight my battles fo my father da guidening light/ shit ain't right i don't even know if da nigga dat made me alive/ did he lose his way home left me alone to survive/ i wuz taught to keep my head up cuz i struggled since da day of my birth/ i'd rather be in heaven than here fo wut it's worth/ but life wuz neva promised so i stay hopin fo a better tomorrow/ make life a lil betta fo my momma cuz she feelin too much sorrow/ it kills me to see people i luv in such a mental state/ like da world has stopped spinnin and it ended no faith/
we gotta keep our head up through these times like ruff weather/ drama heavy on my heart pushin me around easier than feathers/ if i had one chance i would take advantage of the situation/ i gotta keep ma head up through these trials and tribulations/


i ain't afraid and worried bout hell cuz I already livin in it/ i've regreted many actions i've taken but i hope God's luv i'll win it/
ain't no tellin wut will happen cuz tomorrow ain't even promised/
but too many runnin around like they immortal all they practice is malice/ blasphemy to our god i've witnessed in numerous occasions/ i plan on sellin records not my soul when i'm over this probation/ i don't go to church sunday school i don't preach/ i feel like i need direction so i could be able to teach/ the kids of tomorrow tell me who will embrace them/ tell me who is goin to care ain't no way we could replace them/ i believe every body got a soul purpose in life/ until u figure yours out keep ya head up in da strife/

hey yo i wuz jus sittin here and some thoughts popped in my head. i'm uppin fo response to dis piece.

ay yo uppin fo response. somebody holla

you need to make your flow better and you also need a better vocab
and make you rythms better
don't just make the end words rhyme go like this

nobody got the heat can't stand this shit so i kill what they speak
lying at my feat blood on the ground all around look so bleak
like tupac does heat n feat then speak n bleak
or like biggie
im a gangsta in 8 states im a felon ask why shot gun put the shell in blast ya fuckin ass n put a hole in your mellon
my move is the size of a rebellion i amm the shit
fellon shell in n mellon rhyme together than rebellion goes with that for the last one then you can say any ending rhyme with that
then you rhyme off of shit but the trick is to have the same amount of rhyming words you used in the first on so that the flow is all the same
then when you get better you make the cyllibals all match up and it flows unbalivable but its mad hard
but thats how you can get better
you need to follow a rhyme scheme you can event make your own up

This shit was WACK......
AHHHHHHHHH
ITS LIKE THIS FUCKIN OPEN MIC BREEDS FUCKIN WACK ASS WANNA BE MC'S....


work on it alot kid



Peace.....
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Ps:.....i aint gonna say shit about ya lyrics cuz i dont wanna hurt a 1st graders feelings.....im mean but not that mean,,,

thx fo da tips chemistry and fuck u rawdeadly. all of yo response to anybody is they wack. fuck is up wit dat yo? if u think i'm dat shitty battle me. i wanna see yo skillz. u probably got none. all u got is hater skillz. bitch azz nigga.


P.S. fuck u rawdeadly

hahaha
we mad?
awwwwww
did our little hip hop dreams get crushed?
suck a dick and call it a day rookie....
hahahaha......bitch....haha


Peace....
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