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Old 09-26-05, 11:55 PM   #1
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Done Deal FIRST SINGLE!!!! "Between the Lines".......

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yeah!!! Done Deal in this bitch, me and Reflekt aka Implicit tearin this shit up... Reflekt basically kills this, my quality sounds kinda bad and for some reason we couldnt get my re-recorded and better vocals to work but yeah! you'll see whats comin.........


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Old 09-27-05, 12:37 AM   #2
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wait im confused...
whos singing?
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Old 09-27-05, 12:49 AM   #3
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Reflekt

like i said , he basically killed it on this track
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lmao at tha singin decent but damn blayy you know i gotta get at you right?...
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Old 09-27-05, 03:11 AM   #5
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say what?


and somebody please leave decent feed on this
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Old 09-27-05, 03:13 AM   #6
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Somebody gots to leave us some feed.
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Old 09-27-05, 04:28 AM   #7
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im about to leave feed in just a second, so leave feed ont he song im gonna be dropping after i leave feed back on 2 songs
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Old 09-27-05, 04:52 AM   #8
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the first singing part is decent jjust should have lowered the part where you went over it with a deeper voice, then it would sound doper.. you can sing but not that good, well kinda good, just get better confidence, you should have fucked with your recording program so that you sound better, you could have added echos or somehting to make it sound more better and clear

chorus, you got to get more sonfidence behind the mic you got to over power the song make it yours when you sing, dont be pussy your already singing so do it with all you got and then some more, the lyrics for the chorus are decent, you need to have more power behind every word song and spoke in this chorus, even your adlibs are not powerfull enough you should have screamed, lol well not creamed but you know what io mean

1st verse, lyrics are kinda wack, but hey who cares, lol nah you need to work on your lyrics and your quality isnt that good, your flow is the same as alot of poeple on RV which is not good becuase its probably the same as alot of poeple around the world
you need to take over the mic dont let the mic control you, step up your game, you got to go all out, but im guessing your the guy whos re-recorded verse wouldnt work so i guess this is OK for a rough draft, not feeling the beat the real song is OK but im not a big fan which makes me not a big fan for this song, im more of a "real" hip hop song but i guess your verse was OK

chorus is a lil catchy, just aint feeling the lack of emotion


2nd verse, you had alot more emotion iny our voice then the first guy , but i dont really believe what you are saying and if your not believable then thats not good, you need to step up on the lyrics our battles are hella better than this, step up the lyrics, and in a few more tracks you guys should be alot better, but for now good shit


i give this
RV=6.5-7.0
real world=4.0-4.5

so pretty decent

RTF when my track gets put up in a few more minutes
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Old 09-27-05, 03:36 PM   #9
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thanks for the feed to everyone. we will return the favor.
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Old 09-27-05, 04:17 PM   #10
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wow chorus had me pumped for this song...then i was dissapointed when the vocals came in....blay your quality is ass....flow was aight, you sped up like one time to catch the beat.....you need more confidence , better delivery, and better prescence....chorus is catchy..dude singin reminds me of akon....and implicit delivery was nice came in strong flow was on point...it was nice
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ewww singing is bad. dat was a mistake fam, singing aint something u can half ass
Beat is hot of course JEZZY
1st verse im not feeln, no presence, lyrics wack, FLow and deluvery need major work
up the volume and quality.
yo for real the singing needs to be done by someone who could sing. no hate
2nd verse better flow, lyrics nothing special at all. work on delivery, presnce and breath control.
overall 3/10 beat is hot
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Old 09-27-05, 05:03 PM   #12
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wow chorus had me pumped for this song...then i was dissapointed when the vocals came in....blay your quality is ass....flow was aight, you sped up like one time to catch the beat.....you need more confidence , better delivery, and better prescence....chorus is catchy..dude singin reminds me of akon....and implicit delivery was nice came in strong flow was on point...it was nice

thats exactly what i thought of of the song.......


but like i said, i had much better vocals
that was like my "rough draft" to see how it would work
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Old 09-27-05, 05:21 PM   #13
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its ok....sir Blay McBlizzy blay
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Old 09-27-05, 05:31 PM   #14
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Feeling The Beat.. The Hook Woulda Been Better If Ya Got A Real Singer...lol... Not A Bad Hook... Dude Just Can't Sing... First Verse Sounds Off... Almost Like You Were Reading Off The Page... Second Verse Was Straighter Than 6 O'clock... Get The First Verse Like The Second And Fix That Singing Part And Ya Track Will Be Pretty Decent.... Liked The Concept Of It... Almost Like Some Akon Shyt...lol... Werd... Holla At The Link Fellas... New Track On Sound Click
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Old 09-27-05, 05:35 PM   #15
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^Will do man. Thanks for the feed.
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