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1 | 16.67% |
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5 | 83.33% |
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12-21-04, 01:22 PM
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The Rulers Back
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Virtue vs Limited Edition
IP: CDAA 2D0A
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Topical 20-30 Lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting Topic-Suicide Contemplation this is for the crew battle between The Committe an Ill IntentionZ Minimum posts to vote: 20 Check in by: 12-22-04 at 01:22 PM Must drop verse in 1440 minutes after check in. |
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12-21-04, 01:36 PM
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IP: CDAA 2D0A
Virtue has ACCEPTED this battle on 12-21-04 01:36 PM.
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12-21-04, 02:34 PM
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The Rulers Back
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IP: CDAA 2D0A
Topic Suicide Contemplation only a knifes grasp away as night surpasses day i reject myself being born... vivid pictures dipicting my lifes troubles as i solemly mourn... this fusion surpasses expectations my state of being in a delusion.. stigmata inserts uncommon laserations the pain details it not a illusion.. my last words scripture litericy in my journal for those to it may concern... over the months ive grown nocturnel a insomniac my mind in state of no return.. now a shadowed lost soul light no longer exists only darkend expressions.. forsaken happiness is what my heart nurishes but never found..only deep depressions.. the image of the hammer cocks..but hesitation speaks as thoughts veir to a equal.. hell on my mind the destination reeks..couldnt have a unborn afraid of another sequal a metamorphic sight as i cower to my knees..an beg for me to pairish.. i ask god please hear me out tonight i feel a magnificent hand. skin prevails frailish.. but it briefly fades away the superior figure abruptly aborted... my body adamantly becomes numb my mind an bones become distorted.. i couldnt move..im in a state of translution the signs are signifigent.. a sharpe incision runs through my arm feels like tissue rippin ligiment... the chain of pain rushes as the razor blade adapts to the veins..a resolution.. a rush of moments flash before my eyes like on going trains its..deaths evolution exumed an weary my situation has arised tears revoke from my eyes..a burnin sensation as i cut slowly produced no conformation provoke the blue blood from my wrists station last words..a drop of blood for every tear...this is for the better... my eyes oblivious to what i just read...as i put down this fans letter... |
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12-21-04, 06:30 PM
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IP: 03A1 A28A
Limited Edition has ACCEPTED this battle on 12-21-04 06:30 PM.
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12-21-04, 11:40 PM
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IP: 03A1 A28A
...The Pain In My Soul...Unreal Beyond Beleif...
...I Die...Die In Utter Despair...By My Own Hands... The time ticks slowly...the bell rings...I drop my pencil lead... ...The last day of school...for me anyway...tonight I will be dead The ringing lasts years...I look around...nobody meets my gaze... ...The pain inside of me...hurts a little more...dry leaves to a fiery blaze Nobody talks to me...as I walk into the bustling beginnings of life... ...Bullies run into me...I hide my face...nobody even cares that I'm alive The lock to my locker...I twist and turn...angry...and so very depressed... ...I even told people my plot...but they laugh at what I so seriously confessed The door swings open...I tear down my cheek...the garbage bag is prepared... ...For this life...I would trade for anything...EVERYTHING is better when compared The bag is heavy with my books...at least my family wouldn't have to come... ...I wish I didn't have to do this...I wish my life could be completely re-done Depression sinks into my skin...the girl I love slithers like a salamander... ...She does not even give me a glance...well I guess it's stuck-up standard The snow outside...bites at me...cold, bitter, howling...just like my soul... ...I feel nothing...the only task in my mind takes my conscious wit full control I look at the sun...the last one I will ever see...I won't see tomorrow... ...Even God is mocking me...I'm trudging through winter's deep sorrow The snow falling down to me...it's like an actual metaphore for myself... ...Me...shattered to pieces...me drowning in my emotional bad health I walk in my door...my dad looks to me and says... "Your grades can be better..." ...Great, that's all I really need...some more shit to add to the suicide letter My phone's ringtone sets off...the possibility of pain stalking like a panther... ...My mom's hurtful words spread like cancer...why did I really have to answer? Now it is night time...I am sitting on my bed...my pen and paper in hand... ..."It's nobody's fault...I guess I am really just a week and feeble man" "Nobody is to blame...well maybe you are for causing me so much pain..." ..."You wouldn't listen to me...You thought there was somethin wrong wit my brain" "Fuck you...fuck you all for taking my soul...you destroyed it literally..." ..."You are laughin' now, until you realize all of you were truly killing me..." ...My Neck Is Slit...I Am Finally Dead... ...My Soul Burning In Hell... ...Did I Really Escape..?... |
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12-21-04, 11:41 PM
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IP: 03A1 A28A
...The Pain In My Soul...Unreal Beyond Beleif... ...I Die...Die In Utter Despair...By My Own Hands... The time ticks slowly...the bell rings...I drop my pencil lead... ...The last day of school...for me anyway...tonight I will be dead The ringing lasts years...I look around...nobody meets my gaze... ...The pain inside of me...hurts a little more...dry leaves to a fiery blaze Nobody talks to me...as I walk into the bustling beginnings of life... ...Bullies run into me...I hide my face...nobody even cares that I'm alive The lock to my locker...I twist and turn...angry...and so very depressed... ...I even told people my plot...but they laugh at what I so seriously confessed The door swings open...I tear down my cheek...the garbage bag is prepared... ...For this life...I would trade for anything...EVERYTHING is better when compared The bag is heavy with my books...at least my family wouldn't have to come... ...I wish I didn't have to do this...I wish my life could be completely re-done Depression sinks into my skin...the girl I love slithers like a salamander... ...She does not even give me a glance...well I guess it's stuck-up standard The snow outside...bites at me...cold, bitter, howling...just like my soul... ...I feel nothing...the only task in my mind takes my conscious wit full control I look at the sun...the last one I will ever see...I won't see tomorrow... ...Even God is mocking me...I'm trudging through winter's deep sorrow The snow falling down to me...it's like an actual metaphore for myself... ...Me...shattered to pieces...me drowning in my emotional bad health I walk in my door...my dad looks to me and says... "Your grades can be better..." ...Great, that's all I really need...some more shit to add to the suicide letter My phone's ringtone sets off...the possibility of pain stalking like a panther... ...My mom's hurtful words spread like cancer...why did I really have to answer? Now it is night time...I am sitting on my bed...my pen and paper in hand... ..."It's nobody's fault...I guess I am really just a week and feeble man" "Nobody is to blame...well maybe you are for causing me so much pain..." ..."You wouldn't listen to me...You thought there was somethin wrong wit my brain" "Fuck you...fuck you all for taking my soul...you destroyed it literally..." ..."You are laughin' now, until you realize all of you were truly killing me..." ...My Neck Is Slit...I Am Finally Dead... ...My Soul Burning In Hell... ...Did I Really Escape..?... |
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12-21-04, 11:42 PM
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IP: 03A1 A28A
...The Pain In My Soul...Unreal Beyond Beleif...
...I Die...Die In Utter Despair...By My Own Hands... The time ticks slowly...the bell rings...I drop my pencil lead... ...The last day of school...for me anyway...tonight I will be dead The ringing lasts years...I look around...nobody meets my gaze... ...The pain inside of me...hurts a little more...dry leaves to a fiery blaze Nobody talks to me...as I walk into the bustling beginnings of life... ...Bullies run into me...I hide my face...nobody even cares that I'm alive The lock to my locker...I twist and turn...angry...and so very depressed... ...I even told people my plot...but they laugh at what I so seriously confessed The door swings open...I tear down my cheek...the garbage bag is prepared... ...For this life...I would trade for anything...EVERYTHING is better when compared The bag is heavy with my books...at least my family wouldn't have to come... ...I wish I didn't have to do this...I wish my life could be completely re-done Depression sinks into my skin...the girl I love slithers like a salamander... ...She does not even give me a glance...well I guess it's stuck-up standard The snow outside...bites at me...cold, bitter, howling...just like my soul... ...I feel nothing...the only task in my mind takes my conscious wit full control I look at the sun...the last one I will ever see...I won't see tomorrow... ...Even God is mocking me...I'm trudging through winter's deep sorrow The snow falling down to me...it's like an actual metaphore for myself... ...Me...shattered to pieces...me drowning in my emotional bad health I walk in my door...my dad looks to me and says... "Your grades can be better..." ...Great, that's all I really need...some more shit to add to the suicide letter My phone's ringtone sets off...the possibility of pain stalking like a panther... ...My mom's hurtful words spread like cancer...why did I really have to answer? Now it is night time...I am sitting on my bed...my pen and paper in hand... ..."It's nobody's fault...I guess I am really just a week and feeble man" "Nobody is to blame...well maybe you are for causing me so much pain..." ..."You wouldn't listen to me...You thought there was somethin wrong wit my brain" "Fuck you...fuck you all for taking my soul...you destroyed it literally..." ..."You are laughin' now, until you realize all of you were truly killing me..." ...My Neck Is Slit...I Am Finally Dead... ...My Soul Burning In Hell... ...Did I Really Escape..?... Fuck...I screwed up...sorry about that.... |
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12-22-04, 12:24 AM
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L.E
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IP: 03A1 A28A
A'ight...this battle is bein slept on...uppin' this shit for some fuckin votes...favors will be returned..
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12-22-04, 12:42 AM
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IP: 0825 899A
Nice, Nice, Nice, By Far The Best Battle Ive Seen Here.
Flow-Virtue Vocab-Virtue Meaning-Limited Metas-None Really Vocab-Virtue Vote-Virtue Reason-Had A Couple Nice Lines.He Opened Up Strong And Finsihed Strong. *The Was No Voting Area. |
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12-22-04, 08:22 PM
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C.hristopher S.ean D.abatos
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This was feedback posted for Virtue
IP: A34C 61B2
hmmm, this was a okay battle, i've seen better from the both of you.. But i believe Virtue won this due to his vocabulary
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12-22-04, 08:42 PM
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This was feedback posted for Virtue
IP: 5C7F 96DD
can't vote so...checking the polls....good luck hoes...
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12-22-04, 08:55 PM
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IP: D5FE 7245
Voted For: Limited Edition
really close battle...props to both ok this is how it is... depth/emotion-limited had more depth and emotion to this...its a very important aspect and he got this one because of all the examples he used...virt had a great amount of emotion as well but i was feelin limiteds more...he used good examples in every line to support the characters thoughts... vocabulary-virtue...this was close but virtue had a better vocabulary and he used the right words to draw me in and keep me in tune with the verse flow-lmited...he just had a better flow in my opinion, when i was reading it both felt like they had stretched lines etc. but limited had less and was an easier read... imagery-limited...this was VERY close as well, because of limiteds emotion limited brought out a certain vocabulary that made the imagery shine a lot and every line i could picture it better then virts... beginning/end-virtue...it felt like virts verse drew me in more at the beginning and the end was really good it was a ending i would of never thought of so i was feelin that alot so both brought some hard shit to the table but in the end im gonna have to pick limited for having better aspects down looks like you put a lot of work into it... good luck to both no hate on anybody peace
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12-22-04, 10:19 PM
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IP: 6CB8 12EC
Voted For: Virtue
L.E. I thought you came real weak on this... Didn't you really almost commit suicide? Thought you would be better... Maybe what you said is true... But talk about your feelings and put more emotion in it... Virtue... Nice drop man... From bar one i could feel the emotion... Flow seems to be a lil off in places... But the lyrics are damn near flawless... Good job... |
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12-23-04, 05:02 PM
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Just Another DipSet
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IP: A9DF 380A
Voted For: Virtue
both had really nice pieces...virtue that was one nice drop...... limited...we old fam...your shit was good too.....both had nice flow...but LD yours was alttle hard to keep up to.....virtue...came harder with the vocab....both had a good story...but i feel virtue came harder overall.....vote:vitue....
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12-23-04, 05:34 PM
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The Rulers Back
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IP: 5510 817C
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