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Old 10-10-04, 04:41 AM   #1
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Rhyme for the Moment

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Aight it's been awhile since i dropped anything, i'm a little rusty, anywho this goes to the beat for "sing for the moment", hence the title...this is just a rough draft, and it's not finished.....

everynight i sit a home thinkin about my perfect life
so much anger built up, so i pick up a pen and write
lyrics on the page and release some rage
angry self watchin the ink sribble down on the page
i'm wondering where my friends have gone, it's like.....
now that ive go a job, it's like i've done something wrong
but what they don't understand, i'm trying to move on
that's why it's been awhile since i wrote a fuckin song
if you don't understand me then how can you judge me
and when you walk by me, why ya always gotta nudge me
like you got something to prove and something to show
it's clear to me we're no longers friends, i know we're foes
i tried to talk with you, tried to sort this shit out
but i guess it's not meant to be, i'll have to live without
so until we finish this nothing will ever be fine
sit back relax, cause i'm still not done with this rhyme

rhyme with me, rhyme for the year
rhyme for the laughter, rhyme for the tear
rhyme with me,just for today
maybe tomorrow, the good Lord will take you away

now lets move on, come on now we gotta get real
every lyric i write, you know it's how i feel
whether it's emotion, dissing, whatever i share
there's atleast one line in my rhymes you can compare
your life to, "like damn...i can relate to this"
so you continue to read and listen as you reminisce

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Drop some feed, drop links, i'll return favor.....word
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Old 10-10-04, 02:32 PM   #2
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damn i like the xchorus the idea basically the hole thing was off the hook i give it 9/10
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Old 10-11-04, 01:33 AM   #3
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thanks, uppin for more freedback
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Old 10-11-04, 02:16 AM   #4
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i love the idea....i have one pretty much just like this...with the same idea and all.......i loved the hook.....only thing i can say somewhat negative is that there werent a whole lot of multis.....but other than that.....it was nice
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Old 10-13-04, 04:27 AM   #5
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uppin for some feedback, drop links i'll return the favor
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Old 10-13-04, 05:16 AM   #6
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diz iz eminem song u jst changed da wordz
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Old 10-13-04, 10:50 AM   #7
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what up ur right i could relate to some things...like since i quit dealin n got a job my friends all look at me different n it's like im trynna do better for myself n they dont respect that
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Old 10-13-04, 03:16 PM   #8
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hottnessdefined? OMG are you serious i didn't have a clue....it's called using the same beat.
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Old 10-13-04, 03:21 PM   #9
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thats shit was aight but everyone has already used that idea
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Old 10-13-04, 04:02 PM   #10
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good shit verbatim, liked ya flow, the hook and liked the idea, 8.5/10, holla at me sometime for a collab or something and drop honeset feedback on "Doomed Fate-Double Homicide: MT/Myth"
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Old 10-14-04, 08:36 PM   #11
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Word, thanks for the feed, i'd be down for a collab, i'll pm ya here soon
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