just a lil somethin i came up with in the last couple hours



when i'm just chillin sittin,blessin my competition/
common sense is plus efficeint,you wishin you was in it/
messin wit it,told you once-when i spit the shits infinit/
from chrome to lyrics,damn let me slow 'for i offend your feelins/
take a step back,what you lookin at-take that mean muggin back/
oh you just gone off them drugs,wishin you could book shows with me and we dapped/
but fuck that,i'm up here now playa and i made that/
basement sat and blazed raps,from hay stacks to deejayed tracks/
signin' not off but on,blindin the soft with strong/
metaphorical prize winner,send chill shivers through my rhymes in song/
that pass through like grey poupon,first one here last man gone/
you say im past the don,but hold tough dog-i just got on/
messin wit'cha,stroll so bold and sharp it bit ya/
best ta hold ya lip cause,i scold so cold itll melt ya like wax and drip ya/
max pain is what im here ta deliver,short on flow and im the river/
demonic minded sinner,dont rewind yall thats just my beginner/


i dont know

tell me what you think....1

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yo that was tight just need some work on ur structer but the overall is good
holla at ur boy

flow on this was aight..kinda went off a lil but that was your strong point..switch up the structure a lil and you'll be set...decent drop champ

return the favor
Sage-How to Breathe through the Disease

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pretty tight drop mayn i liked it......like simple sage said work on structure cuz some of yalines waz stretched a lil bit but its aight....nice multi's too man keep it up

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.:Retired:.

aight man.... nice wordplay....

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DeTiCaTeD To A TrUe LyRiCiSt

waddup sounded pretty good i kno u done better but it was pretty good aight lata playa

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thanx for the feedback yall...yeah i know the lines were a lil long but that was the only way i could get it to flow...and the first line was sopposed to begin at "when im just chillin sittin"...but the but when i pasted it the heading or whatever that is got crammed to the first line...ima go edit it now...thanx again for the feedback...much love....1

p.s. sleepers....go ryde a sybian* and get off mine
*(i just learned that word and wanted to use it)lol

the first line is still crammed...it didnt look like that in the preview so i dunno...1

^^^^^^^^^^^uppin^^^^^^^^^^^^^

what the hell does that word mean!?! im glad ur smart but im not so explain lol

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