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Old 01-17-04, 09:03 PM   #1
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Question just startin' out

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dont get down in a slum
i just do this for fun
i dont plan on bein missed
if anything i plan on bein dissed
but the next thing im gunna say is gunna get you pissed
so dont diss me
i aint no mc
it wont really bother me if i dont win
just takin this shit for a spin
but just remember, dissin me... its like a sin
ill leave more marks on ya then them tattoos on ya skin
so think before you spary
and remember to watch whatcha say
my shits hotter then Miami in may
and when you respond make sure its not a bore
cuz if it is ill have to hit ALT+F4


and thats it just tell me what ya think...
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Old 01-17-04, 11:18 PM   #2
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This wasnt all that good....you need to elevate here.....structure needs fixed up, try keeping the lines around the same length so its structured good....work on your content and topic ideas....try adding some multies to this to make it better....but keep at it.
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Old 01-18-04, 12:13 AM   #3
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good for beginnin..

dope cause....you aren't cocky which is a plus...i see potential...

adding multis....a unique flow and scheme..and your set...

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