This is Magnificent, Not Fifty Cent
somethin i just cooked up...

Pressed to be flexin and tested by confession
thus blessed is my message not frought with aggression
So best keep em guessin and fade back to da shades
My microphone pressin with attack between ya blades,
Shoulders, rock it like boulders, VIP card holders,
Yo World War Three, You know me and my soldiers,
peace defenders, social agenda mixed up in a blenda
mass media sold out and the devil's the lender
So who bought it? Maybe us when we should have brought it
don't see it? Your eyes must be blind or at least dotted
and ink blotted, overanalyze, with focus on the prize
show dignity in our rise look to the skies forget the mesmerize
of politicians who invent words like fictician
and well used elisions . . . . . . cuz it's their mission
so fight with precision, cuz you'll need against da swords and da slings
make careful decisions, or you'll be caugt by da whores and da bling

holla back when you peep this...

{Peace}

you had some pretty cool ideas and good flow in this...you kept it real man...somewhat went off....but it was a good read.....i can see some improvement in u with some multis here and some internals there...

props and 1.

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..Ghetto Essence..

kid you have alot of potential... i see it here in this piece... this ain't the illest... it was nice... no real complexity but i mean ish was good tho... keep elevating... i was some what likin this... multis an ish was nice... keep gettin at it dunny... overall 7/10

Caesar - On3

Peep my ~A bullet for your thoughts~

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~Sitting In Elevation Position~


Free
Agent

Just A Sick Newbie

Murked - Lust

Lost - None

not bad piece
flowed well..
u seemed abit too focused on that though and it hindered what you were trying to say overall
content was alright beter than average, especially from a newer member
just keep writing..
you'll improve with time
expreiment with rhyme schemes ideas etc

pax

thanks for the feed yall... i just cranked it out at work... it definitely has some large holes... I think the next step is to pick some significant topics to talk about...

keep it comin

{Peace}

can i get just one more feed on this?

anybody?

{Peace}