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02-15-04, 02:19 PM
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One Man on the Ground
IP: 11F0 89D4
Just try to understand it....
It was late 'n made, the kids were full of amazement A chilling winter night, slowly moving the pavement Little bits of ice were pounding down on it blatant Several radiant day`s were now processed and fading I`m the type to ponder the wonders beyond thought Making the people around me flustered and taut I was clashing with this world that is turning black Was I really meant to end up sitting on my ass? How was God so cold to those like me to have - This secret understanding of the colors in our flag I mean it`s sad when our founding dad`s are statued Spending millions alone, while we turned our backs to - The so called 'Union' thats more corrupt than satan Forget this Nations fashion statement of enslavement Fuck the FBI, what the fucks there to investigate Crack, drug dealers and more of them molesting me When I said 'get em off the streets' I didn`t mean dope I know it helps ya'll folk, but poverty needs hope I sleep in a trash bag, in rags, I`m even more free Because ya'll can`t seem to buy me a fuckin' decent story Try to sell me, go to hell 'G, what the fuck you need? - A scapegoat for those like me? That shits been history Since when did poverty become new to this society? They still tryn' me, but I refuse, fuck notoriety I`m ready to blast back for this ransack of my privacy Internet piracy is entirely biased, don`t lie to me I`m reminded daily of the worthlessness of our lives - To the justice system, so I try to revive in time I`ll decide for myself, ya fucking racist bitches I`ll never want a spare of filthy tastless riches You dirty devils, you, relying on my help? Fuck it, when will people learn I`m above the belt. As I walked along, the clock tower read eleven Children were sledding, another soul went off to heaven The skies are now prying crystalized dyes from above From God`s eyes which are only weeping because of us All the lie`s in which we trusted, rusted and shed The defiance only stirs our savior to leave us dead There was a slight tint of red in the atmosphere Providing little light, that rarley happened here With death rates on the rise the skies were black Protruding from God, I understood and looked back - At the clock again as it read a quarter to twelve ..Damn another lost soul just went off into hell It was an awkward position I was put in, at the moment - Less and less figures were clear in the open I then slid my copious feet across the ground Slip, and then trip, damn, not a sound... The clock tower then sounded and played I was full of terror for I hated today Just a couple more seconds of this shit and I`m out I looked around and saw a crowd slowly leaving proud ..Proud for what?, I kept asking myself sarcastically ..Stupid fucks don`t know shit, no morality.. And so I looked once more, only I was on the floor The grounds were pounded by hailing downpours - Of huge crystal balls that God sent down killing the suckers As I was protected by a safeguard, fullfilling my mother`s - Last wishes before she passed, It was 'stand tall for yourself And yourself only, ..But, stay down when God is angry at the world' I achieved full glory and understood fully what my mother meant.. Fading slowly:Oer the land of the free and the home of the brave.
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02-15-04, 02:34 PM
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IP: 24A3 0EF0
i understood the first verse perfectly..
but the second didnt sink in so much the flow really kept the piece ticking over and encouraged me to read as much as the story nice imagery.. the weather parts were a nice touch.. could picture it well overall a nice drop.. some was above my head but still good reading would appreciate a reply to my joint 'anopheles' getting slept on.. props 1/2 n 1/2 |
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02-15-04, 02:35 PM
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Light Weight
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IP: 6D0E 69D5
Intense.
no other word for that flow. Im not sure i really loved every line but i think at least 90 percent of it was brilliant... Since when did poverty become new to this society? They still tryn' me, but I refuse, fuck notoriety I`m ready to blast back for this ransack of my privacy Internet piracy is entirely biased, don`t lie to me ^wow, the 3rd line has a nice use of a different rhyme. It's like painting a picture with primarily blues and greens and then throwin in a point of red to drive the viewers eyes... With death rates on the rise the skies were black Protruding from God, I understood and looked back - At the clock again as it read a quarter to twelve ..Damn another lost soul just went off into hell ^Ill shit man, i found the elision showed me exactly where the pause was and helped me understand your flow keep up the good work {Peace} |
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02-15-04, 02:41 PM
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IP: 202C A952
you know... i don't konw aobut this piece... complexity but no vocab (good)... i mean it was less understanding then who killed kennedy (all we know is that the person shoot him from inside the car) i read this a few times... i mean... if there was a meaning... i didn't get it... but it was coo tho keep me on foot... ending wasn't great... but it was coo... 8.5/10
Caesar - On3 Peep My ~A Bullet For Your Thoughts~
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02-15-04, 03:01 PM
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IP: 11F0 89D4
it's kind of easy to grasp this....i can't believe ya'll can't......i know theres a lot....but the main theme is just right in front of your face....
It starts out, winter night, the guy begins to think to himself about the governement and the corruptiveness, obviously he's a homeless guy that has accepted poverty, but has a problem with the way the nation is run. founding dad's statued is mnt. Rushmore if you didnt know. i want poverty off the streets, but they think i mean drugs. the news reporters want me on the news, but i refuse. i just speak of the prejudices of our nation, and how i'm above all of it.... the italics, i was describing my surroundings, and as you know the grounds are icy from the pounding ice that god is sending down because he is sad, and i eventually slipped and fell, as did everyone else. as the clock hit 12 the 'national anthem' began playing, i couldn't bear, and the others with their fake pride get up and walk proudly. they end up getting pelted with hail from above, while i'm protected because i stayed down, hence the title: One Man on the Ground. My mother told me, at the end i show you that the national anthem played... the whole theme is that out of everyone, i was the only one that was above the rest, and understood how this nation is run, and how fucked up everything is...being poverty stricken you learn to understand it....so when the anthem played, it was disgraceful to me, i stayed down and was saved, as they got up and all perished.... i know it could be complicated, but once you grasp it, its a whole new understanding... thanks for listenin' in...and i hope you get something from this..... Peace and 1.
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..Ghetto Essence.. Last edited by Khôi NguJin : 02-15-04 at 03:08 PM. |
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02-15-04, 03:05 PM
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IP: 202C A952
OOOOHHHH ... Yep... tooo deep for my explansion... 9.0/10 ... yep... good dunny
Caesar - On3
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~Sitting In Elevation Position~ Free Agent Just A Sick Newbie Murked - Lust Lost - None |
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