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Old 12-09-03, 08:48 PM   #1
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You’re gone and
The whispers of sweet melodies once again glide across the room, into my ears
and the light’s dim as our souls begin to dance to the same slow jam,
hands glide down my sides and our love incenses the room.
The melodies of each song intertwine, as does our bodies.
Lost in a zone of ecstasy, your emotions are casted into my heart and I love him once again.
This stranger I’ve longed for has seeped out of the pores and created my love, rekindled the worn out flame.
But still I know him not.
Days go by and we breathe hand in hand once again.
As I pray for the unknown to never leave, I feel the change as the body re-saturates in hatred and mine in confusion.
I look into the mirror and see the blackness of bruise re-surface under my eye, and the tears scold my cheeks.
Once again I look for the strangers eyes, the one who just held me close, but I get lost in the trench of evil,
and I realize
your back.
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Don't Look Into My Eyes Forgotten
Understanding
Once Again
"It requires wisdom to understand wisdom:
the music is nothing if the audience is deaf."
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Old 12-10-03, 12:23 AM   #2
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wow nice heart felt poem...i really injoyed it...im not to give a leason due to the more experience you have over me...this peice was sweet i really injoyed it...much respect...

keep writting

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Old 12-10-03, 06:56 PM   #3
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thanks hun
uppin this
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Don't Look Into My Eyes Forgotten
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"It requires wisdom to understand wisdom:
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Old 12-10-03, 07:28 PM   #4
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damn nice work .. hard topic ... its good you can express it ... and i hope shit gets better ... keep your head up and dont deal with bullshit you dont have to u kno? ... nice piece
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Old 12-10-03, 10:29 PM   #5
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I like this even though i thought it was going somewhere else, i feel these topics have become so played, the skill was there but the same story irritated me, 1luv.
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Old 12-11-03, 03:34 PM   #6
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nicely written piece
it seemed to focus more on the message, feelings and thoughts more then any of the technical stuff, like structure, but it still sounds good, and shows i good detail and a strong message.
this topic tends to be done quiet a bit, but you still kept me interested and focused on what i was reading. you added your own touch to it.
the simple intro drew me for some reason, im not sure why, and the outro was great.
keep it up!

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Old 12-11-03, 09:56 PM   #7
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thanks for the reply
Babygurl... this isnt personal, but thanks for the concern
i really wasnt worrying about complexity or anything
i just put my pen on the paper and wrote what came to mind
i dont read alot about this topic, so to me it's not played, but
w/e i guess
thanks for readin
uppin??
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Old 12-12-03, 05:16 PM   #8
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could you two makeout with me?

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Old 12-13-03, 07:59 AM   #9
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real nice work........you handled the topic well..........very easy to read....keep it up
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Old 12-13-03, 12:00 PM   #10
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THIS WAS GOOD I ENJOYED IT A LOT
KEEP ELAVATING AND WRITE SOME MO SHIT
U NOAH MEAN
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