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Old 01-23-05, 02:21 PM   #1
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love.

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ay well today 1-2-3. when they see my love of my life some say shell become my wife...
ppl know my name buh they dont know that i was made form above N that im actually running this game...
YES i love U,Yes Id able to love 2ice n Yes i Loved howd u came into my life...
this isnt fake nor a lie i wonda why that shouldnt we make a a good couple..
with the stars in ur eyes seem like we past a whole new level n went past far then we ever did, yes i admit it, u flow like a bird, n yes u glow as my heart cries for whoes n some times sorrows................................yes its true.... ....... .........I Love U................
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Old 01-25-05, 07:57 PM   #2
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ok, your structure was horrible man, try to write in a way that is clear and readable, so people can read this, work on vocabulary and spelling, you just need to try harder next time, this was very jumbled and all over the place......keep workin at it..1
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Old 01-26-05, 02:24 PM   #3
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huh...structure all over dogg...like fluid said write it better...lol...u have potential for sure...just keep at it and it will come...~1~
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