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Old 02-22-03, 11:58 AM   #1
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In Depth Critique Week 1: Endovidual - You can't catch us

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Every week I will be posting a different audio here. Basicaly
it is for the audios that Ij feel need and deserve some
quality, in depth critique. So PLEASE leave postotive in
depth critique for the audio below. Thank you.


Artist: Endovidual Feat. Concise & Lucid
Song: You can't catch us
Order: Concise, Lucid, Endovidual
Concise&Endo on the hook.
Topic: Running from the cops.

Note: Feel free to skip over Concise's verse during your
in depth critique. I am not posting this audio in here to
get exposure for MYSELF. It is for the other two people
on this track. Thanks.

http://concise.dmusic.com/music/stream/lofi/46908
http://concise.dmusic.com/music/stream/hifi/46908
http://concise.dmusic.com/
Feel free to download, or leave comments.

Remember to be IN-DEPTH and POSOTIVE
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con-cise adj.
Expressing much in few words; clear and succinct.
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aq·ui·fer n.
Underground flow of water
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Old 02-22-03, 12:19 PM   #2
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Concise Song

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Sounds pretty good, yall talk about dick too much though. The hook is kinda messy too, but its pretty good. I like the ending, maybe we can do a colab sometime.

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Foulplay, damn that nigga will dismay all that pride that you spray, i stack rhymes up like hay, the skils that i display, i aint learn from yesterday
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Old 02-22-03, 02:44 PM   #3
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Thanks, but thats not very in depth. I noticed alot more
flaws in this verse. Thanks anyways...
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Old 02-22-03, 08:36 PM   #4
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Hook - The hook was nicley done, a little cheesy(lol), but definitley sound's good.

Concise - Well, Quality is good. It's a little warm, maybe a little bit too much compression? Anyway's, you got a good voice for rap, but it seem's a little strained at times on emphasis. Maybe if you turn Mic Volume up a tad you wont have to yell as hard but you can deliver it with ease. Your delivery seem's choppy, but that may be because your running out of breath from having to yell the word's, I definitley would recomend you turning your Mic Volume up so you can spit with ease. Your lyric's are mischevious/comical, with a sadistic twist. Definitley above average on the lyrical scale. Now onto flow, Your bar's are even with the beat, But then again your flow does seem choppy, And as i've said numberous time's, it's more then likely from running out of breath. All in all, i'd give you a 7.8/10 (Above average, but still could use some work, But then again...dont we all?)


Lucid - Right off the bat, very commercialized voice. Im liking the voice alot. However, delivery lack's the energy for this beat. I suggest getting into the vibe alot more, get hyped and bring the energy. Flow is definitley there, but with more energy it will definitley liven it up! The lyric's, pretty tight, once again the comical line's are there, and they definitley are interesting and are entertaining for the listener. All in all, i'd give you a 7.3/10 (Above average, and the raw talent is there. With a little more work, i think you could definitley make a name for yourself.)


Endovidual - Voice, your voice is tight, i could hear you on a D12 collaboration for some reason. Your delivery is there, but could definitley use some more energy. Once Again, the comical lyric's, very catching. Yea man, im feeling you. with more work you could definitley mount to something. All in all i'd give you a 7.3/10 (Above average, and the raw talent is there. With a little more work, i think you could definitley make a name for yourself.)



Hope i could help.

~1~ love

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Old 02-22-03, 08:44 PM   #5
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good shit, good shit!!
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Old 02-22-03, 10:00 PM   #6
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Calls himself a moron..

If you feel just because I am on the audio I shoudlnt do this,
then at least change the chosen audio. Like I said, i didnt not
do this to get more exposure for myself, I did it for the other
cats on the track. So at least change the audio for the
In depth critique sticky.......

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