No d/r, crew, or hate votes..due 30 min after checkin you spit first

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checkin..you too big of a pussy to spit first so here i go

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eh yo who the hell want it?/
u woulda thought u ate peanuts the way i put shells in ya stomach//
my flow out this world like, welcome to earth/
round have u in the ground gettin welcome to dirt//
its seldom i squirt/
but if a clown talk trash its his melon i burst//
you provisional acts, i chop lies, deliver the facts/
the only label u on is for nutritional packs//
and u know u get zero deals/
im movin wit big Heat, like im shaquille o'neal//
dont end up wit an open neck/
n u like Rodney dangerfield, dog u gets no respect//
aint no game how i work the mac, who the first to clap?/
n bring the heat like a thermostat//
cuz u kno im the important type/
if it aint nailed down then its bought n priced//
dont a make a nigga off ya life/
and im like Mars son im come wit sweet bars to bite//

Okay string, said you were gonna "rip" me
When the only thing you'll rip is a bad beat
Your new to RB talkin like you Numba one
Well pay attention to this fuckin malediction
Punches flyin fast and hard penetratin the skin
Comin at ya faster than you hittin on senile men
Sorry kid, I didnt mean to incriminate
but look at ya verses and ya flow..ya need to elev8
So justify the reason that you be comin at me
Lost in you're dream world caught up in infidelity

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u the type a clown that'll suck dick just to ride/
aint nobody worried about what this lil fuck implys//
where ya rhymes at? they musta died?/
n u needa stop flowin dog its unjustified//
im good at runnin things like im coachin track/
make niggas lose weight like they smokin crack//
i revoke ya tracks, son please dont ya wack/
i'll fight u closed fist wit an open gat//
dont let ya guard down,cuz B im the closest/
now u lost ya D like u got osteoporosis//
u like locusts, u just a pest/
clap u in ya shoulders and adjust ya stress//
homey u can get in the dirt/
and i aint talkin bout a question mark when i come a riddle ya shirt/
the pistols will hurt, but the truth will kill/
keep flashin ya money n u gone lose ya bills//

you dont spit twice in a battle you fuckin retard, someone just DQ him and give me the W

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you aint seein me son ima let u know that right now

i was about to vote on your shit....you gonna go get it dqued or you want me to vote?

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ight w/e win on a technicality haha i can bounce back

Go ahead and vote please schema ill return the favor on all your battles bro

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String9487

eh yo who the hell want it?/
u woulda thought u ate peanuts the way i put shells in ya stomach//
->>your bar lengths are all over the place...cool concept

my flow out this world like, welcome to earth/
round have u in the ground gettin welcome to dirt//
->>wack

its seldom i squirt/
but if a clown talk trash its his melon i burst//
->>sounds forced and gun talk is played

you provisional acts, i chop lies, deliver the facts/
the only label u on is for nutritional packs//
->>what the fuck is he a calorie? i see where you were going but it doesnt make sense

and u know u get zero deals/
im movin wit big Heat, like im shaquille o'neal//
->>ok

dont end up wit an open neck/
n u like Rodney dangerfield, dog u gets no respect//
->>pretty cool

aint no game how i work the mac, who the first to clap?/
n bring the heat like a thermostat//
->>gun talk turned me off to this but cool meta

cuz u kno im the important type/
if it aint nailed down then its bought n priced//
->>what??

dont a make a nigga off ya life/
and im like Mars son im come wit sweet bars to bite//
->>pretty good

didnt rate your second spit...you only get one


Justify

Okay string, said you were gonna "rip" me
When the only thing you'll rip is a bad beat
->>wack

Your new to RB talkin like you Numba one
Well pay attention to this fuckin malediction
->>what in the HELL is a malediction...rhyme dictionary word for sure

Punches flyin fast and hard penetratin the skin
Comin at ya faster than you hittin on senile men
->>decent

Sorry kid, I didnt mean to incriminate
but look at ya verses and ya flow..ya need to elev8
->>first line doesnt make sense

So justify the reason that you be comin at me
Lost in you're dream world caught up in infidelity
->>infidelity? doesnt make sense


String you need to even up your bars and quit talking about killing...you got a good mind for metas so use it. Justify you need to elevate a lot. Both read the tutorials they helped me out a lot. No hate coming from me cause I dont know either one of you...im just helping. Youll both get better but String took this one.

v/String

\/hit these up honestly\/

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ight man i see where u comin from u good lookin out aint nuttin wrong wit constructive criticism

Feel Da Same As Schema But
String To Me Gun Talk
Is Nothin Keep Doin Ya Thang
But Lessin Da Gun Talk
And Watch Dat Comin Back
It Makes It Seem Like You
Think You Lost
Justify You Did Good
Jus Come A Harder Next Time
Plz Return Da Favors

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I CANT BE WIT
IF YOU NOT WIT ME YOU AGAINST ME
AND IM READY 4 WAR PEACE
BATTLES DAT NEEDS VOTES

string:you had some good punches in there,funny ones at that, i liked ya opener, but ya structure is a little off, you came hard at your opponent and thats what counts in a battle...i liked the line "the only label u on is nutritional packs", good shit...
justify:you had good flow and structure, but you lacked hard punches in ya verse, try using multies in ya verses and personals, u need to work on those..
VOTE:STRING

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