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01-28-05, 01:51 PM | #1 | ||||
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Mista_Auth3ntik vs Whyte Ave.
IP: D5FE 7245
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01-28-05, 04:32 PM | #2 | |||||||
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checkin in.....
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01-28-05, 05:58 PM | #3 | ||||
I walk & walk over you
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Checking In...............
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01-31-05, 07:16 PM | #4 | ||||
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mista couldnt post his verse here it is...
Intro- getting ready for sleep My head felt light headed, so tired by the chores I’ve done Moon shines above my house, black night covered the sun Took an hot shower, to feel clean and ready for morning Brushed my teeth, smelled clean breath, as I yawning Entered my dark room, turned on my broken lamp light As my pupil turned from small to big, I see my bed in sight Still the towel, like an bear hug, wrap around my body I remove the towel. The same time I felt an cool air hit me putted on some boxers covering up my private part Laid on the bed, eyes closed, seeing images, dream starts Dream- Saw myself on a Green land, with beautiful blue skies Air smelled fresh, no despair. Birds flying across my eyes Feeling so wonderful, I guess it was an effect of the shower below my feet’s was an beautiful natural sighting of a flower With its empowered beauty, I look straight and smiled Walking forward, with happiness, no broke emotion, stayed compile Walking on a hill, I had to stomp to stay on balanced Got on the top of the hill, looked, my happiness banished What I saw I couldn’t breathe, left me speechless This was more nasty, more poisonus than fecies Weird creatures, eating the flesh of humans I was disgust and appalled by the blood fumes Tried to run, I’d stepped on a tree branch, cause attention Big yellow eyes, staring at me, I can see my facial reflection As I Gulped with fear, I got shook, when they’d growled They’d open there mouths, disgust blood smelled fouled I’d sprint, leaving them out of sight when I looked back Something stopped me from running, my bones cracked As I feel on the ground, looked up, it was a demon that awake In front of my face, with one slice, My hear went to zero heart rate Awaked and stuck I woked up, sweating coming from my pores I was glad, that there wasn’t green grass on the floor I got shook when I heard a knock on the door I felt this pain on my back when my feet’s hit the floor When I opened it, there was this long hall way I heard my mom’s voice, it echoed, like a cave I’d ran, as I did, I hear my foots sound like an rake The screams got farther, still hoping I can make it I’d stopped, standing worried, hearing no more screams Looked around, there’s no way out, I’m “living” a dream
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01-31-05, 09:38 PM | #5 | |||||||
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Winds furiously swirl in the crisp dark night
No escape in the house as the family fights I run to my room, trying to dodge the doom Lie on my bed, my heart filling with gloom I drown out the screams by closing my eyes And I awake as the sun begins to rise Filling and giving light to cloudless blue skies Birds are singing, and morning dew dances on the grass I think to myself …finally a perfect peaceful morning at last There’s a knock on the door, I ask who is there A cheery voice says …Breakfast, take your chair I walk downstairs, everyone with smiles upon their face I smile back thinking this dream world is the perfect place Mom and dad show affection, while Sis and I don’t bicker A breakfast of sheer perfection, but my eyes start to flicker I hear a loud, painful pounding in the back of my head Everyone else is un-phased; eating the meal they’ve been fed I try to shake off this miserable distraction Sounds of screams then add to the attraction My family’s voices begin to fade from my ears And slowly everything around me begins to disappear I’m alone in a dark room, filled with constant screaming I awake and it’s my mother, I unfortunately was only dreaming |
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02-02-05, 12:50 AM | #6 | |||||||
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ok even on struture flow and vocab and imagery here shit is even straight down on that but one thing seperates this and thats creativity while mista approached the topic from a angle alot of people wouldve whyte went out on a limb and jumped in from another angle and that made his over the hump to get my vote both had good drops and imagery but the creativity made whytes verse better in my eyes
v-whyte ave
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02-02-05, 03:48 PM | #7 | |||||||
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IP: 6FA7 7304
I don't know how to edit these links into my check in
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post1935745 http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=174405 http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=174403 |
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02-02-05, 11:35 PM | #8 | ||||
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lol Mista took this easily
Whyte your vocab was bad..ur flow was off. and ur structure was horrid. way too short and didnt even match. your imaginary wasnt even good. this was bad...why u evne try? mista: ur shit was koo i understood ur shyt u stayed on topic. ur flow was dope....and good structure. im feelin dis overall: vote mista
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02-03-05, 03:55 AM | #9 | |||||||
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^ haha laughs at Kon...I hate you
I didn't have time to write a nice verse...so I did what I could..I keyed that up in 10 minutes..shut up |
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02-03-05, 08:36 PM | #10 | ||||
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nothing much to vote on unfortunately...atleast you dropped whyte ave. and did what you could under 10 minutes i give you props for showing up...mad people would just not do a verse and noshow...
i dont care about structure in my voting as long as it still flows good with the syllable count and your verse flowed descently for the whole thing but i thought mistas flow was better...in this case mista won all aspects, he put a lot more time and effort into his verse and the end result is his win even though you did do good for under 10 minutes you had some good shit whyte... vote Mista_Auth3ntik just make sure to drop really dope your next battle whyte peace
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02-03-05, 11:54 PM | #11 | |||||||
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vote goes to mista i think that whyte did a good quick text but he lacked flow, complexity, and structure...i give it to mista i like how he had his set up and the imagry on the dream was good, good flow, and a good structure...I liked your begining and ending good job give ya 7 or 8 outta ten...good drop
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02-04-05, 06:06 AM | #12 | ||||
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Mista definately put more effort in his verse and yet, Whyte Ave had good verse to....but in the end, my vote goes to MiSta_AuTh3nTiQ...
MiSta_AuTh3nTiQ: quite predictable approach on the topic, found good balance with your vocab and was also feeling your flow. Structure made it easier to read and the imagery was there to. Emotion was strong but might have tried some more creativity...that's only bad comment I think... Whyte Ave.: love your approach on the topic, twisted it a little compared to Mista's verse so creativity definately goes to you. Vocab was good, structure decent but your flow was off here and there...Emotion was raw but could've been more complex and indepth but for a quick drop, it's pretty good actually! DQ
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02-04-05, 02:02 PM | #13 | ||||
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I think that Whyte Ave. took this battle because i could just feel the emotion radiating off of his, like a river. My eyes were just glued to the screen, i didnt get bored at all. it was really good... so yeah, Whyte wins for the emotion and flow aspect....
v/ Whyte
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02-04-05, 04:11 PM | #14 | ||||
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Mista_Auth3ntik wins by 3-1 at the end of voting
Mista +4 Whyte Ave. -2
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