prety decent drop babygirl...
nice wordplay n humour...
a lil psycho in parts, got me thinkin you bout ready to kill the whole male race..
lol, naw just playin
decent drop eyvon, sick flow, an connected the bars well, enojoyable shit
return the fave *wink wink*

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lol... yeah that's me in the sig, thanks. any chance of a pic of you??

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not now..... im on a public comp..... so as i git my own, ill post 1.

uppin!!!!

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not bad i say but that just me lolol i give it a 6.5/10 but just wonder if you in the crew?

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ya, im in... bigpappa liked this so i posted it in ya tryouts.... from the looks of it, seemed everybody enjoyed it. most ppl said i was in, so i consider myself a member.

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how u like my lil tagline 4 50th? "we weill, we will, merk u!" i can see if i can git sum cash 2gether and git a new crew sig. still_remain's r dope. im broke right now, but i can c wut i can do...

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uppin 4 feedback.... any older members (vets) wut u think of my potential? truthfully, no hate

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now im not normally a violent person, unless u give me a reaspn/
but if u pop shit about me, ill shoot u, even if bitch aint in season/
alright
so just cause im a woman dont mean i cant b violent/
in such a sick world, multiple gunshots wont even make media silent/
nice wordplay
its like murder is a game, like a sport or a hobby/
hundreds of ppl git killed everyday, but my song aint about 2 git sobby/
i aint tryin 2 preach, i got 2 much of a backround/
but in my case, if rappin effects were like wrestlin, my lyrics a smackdown/
alright...kinda basic
ive been thru tough times, haters hatin my shit/
drugs, sex, and violence, emotional relationships/
nice flow..i like the emotion behind it
bitch u know im talkin bout u, so dont fuckin deny it/
my records out n exposed, so u cant just hide my shit/
basic..
u raped me bitch, made me pay 4 my own abortion 2/
but u aint gittin away with this im out 2 torture u/
alright
who woulda known id grow up 2 b such a lyrical genius/
date such a fag, slice off both balls from his penis/
ewwww
dangle his dick right in front of his face (ha ha!)/
am i suckin hard enough now?! blast fuckin semen all over the place/
no comment...lol
cmon, bitch, wanna take advatnage of me now? grab my chest and use me 4 sex/
well i guess i aint got a choice, im 2 high 2 fight back, i knew i shoulda refused that X/
basic..
cause i hate u, y the fuck did i date u?/
i should rape u, all iwanted was a thank u/
nooo this was bad.
i did so much shit for u, u never took the time for a glance/
that bitch swingin her thong up in ur face, the hos got u in trance/
alright
do i not mean shit 2 u? i thought that we were sumthin?/
but im stuck another night at home, naked, watchin ur body humpin/
decent
im sick of bein white trash, its time 2 make a come back/
u gonna git ur nuts cracked, im more than just a big rack, boy ima make ur guts clap/
??
squirtin outta ur mouth, unless u watch the shit u speakin/
im cut all ur limbs off, we aint even close 2 the weekend/
wow ur bad
so watch wut u say, else ur out 4 a bitch smack/
think im playin around, but u better just watch yo back!!!
kkkkkkkk .basic shit

overall-6.5/10

it was mostly all basic with no multies and a lil creativity here and there......i see ur potential....juss keep writing.....u could of used multies and metaz to make it better....just some basic shit u wrote but....the emotional load was there.......

return tha favor and give feed on "legend is born"

thanks, uppin for feedback, im almost done with the next verse, should have it by thursday the latest

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please read this and tell me wut yall think.... i could use sum critism

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i lyked this...you a lil violent tho...but that shyt was nyce...some of it was a lil choppy, but overall this was a nyce drop....keep it comming. let em know tha bizness

-lets battle sumtime....

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ya, vote in the battle in my sig (i only need 1 more vote) and aight

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pretty good....

keep it up, girl

do ya thang.

lookin 4ward 2 tha rest

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..:The Greatest Of Our Time:..

dang this was good you definately elevated since our last encounter..im glad to have seen you get better......i knew you had potential and this just showed it off...okay yeah so what if it was basic not every damn rapper uses insane vocab and worplay and shit in every damn song they do......moreless they spit pretty basic stuff its just it flows good so it makes it tight....i thought this was really good lots of emotion and you expressed your feelings..idk if this really happened or not but i got the message....keep it up ma!!!.......ohh and hope to see that pic sometime soon too.....
peace~1

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