www.soundclick.com/joeycarolina

First track, called "My Life"

I was really, really feelin shit when I wrote this song... felt like i was bleedin through my pen for the first time. Unfortunately, I had to record the next day... so a little bit of that was prolly faded when i started recorded, but I really got back in the mood as i started recording. Hope you enjoy.



http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2644942
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2644945

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Theres a prolem with myspace for me....I dunno why..won tlet u listen or download .... upload it to soundclick or summin..and ill hit u back wit feed

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www.soundclick.com/dollaback

aight, i added a SClick link... my bad.

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Its koo man I think theres ummin wrong with my myspace...listening....beat is real nice ..... some dirty south shit...youre quality is a let down..but ure articulation is good.....fllow is nice..ure staying up pretty nice...delivery is good...but it seems sum bits too robotic making it lacking emotion..presence is nice..hook was okay cudda been better if u added etra shit on it... lyrics are nice...holla 1...keep up

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www.soundclick.com/dollaback

word, preciate it


damn yo, i just put this shit up on Myspace and got 7 downloads already
i wish it stayed up there as total downloads, not downloads per day...

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Aight....first thing I noticed was your quality. Your vocals were too loud for the beat. You need some better presence. You sound like you are reading a lot instead of spitting. Your dubs were off too man. Flow wasn't that bad. It sounded off, but that's just because of your presence. You could be alright man, just work on it a little.....

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vocals r too loud.............rattlin tha speakerz.....................

flows oon and good though..................................

deleiverys good too..........................................

i love this beat can u hook me up wit it????

emotion couldbe upped alot doesnt sound like u feelin it......................

pressence is there.............................

lyrics were nice................but i didnt feel hook found it was bland............

overall this was an ight track............first of yers ive peeped........................

7/10 need sum elevation...........but overall pretty decent.........holla at me wit dat beat if u got aim
im
rapzalot

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