iight i relpyd to debit blak magic n seven 3'ds

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/1/c...iwang_music.htm


crazy metas...was a bit rushed but..still killa lyrics..

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HELLLZ YEEAHH !!!!

Iight, man returning the feedback....

you need a new mic, quality is al;kfja;lskfjasl;dfj... .... lyrically this shit is really out-there, lots of vocab, it was put together well in the written sense, your delivery is kinda lack luster in the beginning like you were almost whispering, and it gets better towards the end, but just work on how you put your words out, trying to pronounce as well as you possibly can, your writing is really good, just work on the performance aspects of it and you could get really dangerous with the mic device... but yeah, buy a new mic, and keep workin- ( lots of standout lines in this shit, i'd like to hear it re-recorded w/ better quality cuz Im sure I missed something. ppeeesh.

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Ok, listening...the quality isn't very good, get some better equipment over soon. Not a lot of mic presence on here...not a lot of emotion. The flow was pretty good, don't know if I'm feeling the voice. Overall I'll give it a 4/10

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listening..and wondering why u hated on Black Magiks track....cause its a lot better than this.......

lyrics are kinda twisted...quality is shit...you need to work on the delivery...and your mic presence...cause this gets boring like 30 seconds into it....also..yea get a new mic...up your quality....flow isnt horrible...but i wouldnt consider it good...you need to work on it....Hook...is....not soooo good either...just keep workin

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beat is nice, heard it before i think? lol
flow could be better structures, sorta sounds rushed
delivery could be upped, especially on a battle joint
keep droppin tho man!

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thx ppls...

yea my mic is in jersey...the one i used is for talking..i think,n i'm still gettin the hang of cool edit...but seriously i don't "hate" on no one,i tell it like i hear it...jus like ya'll did n if it's gona get me bad feed..so b it 1nE

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HELLLZ YEEAHH !!!!

besides the quality and lack on emotions i think it was good track no doubt i told ya i like the mixin wit pac's stuff and shit

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Exactly what I was thinking...

But anyways, get a new mic and try spitting your verse a few times before recording, because it seems like you were just talking, not rapping...You lacked emotion, but you have potential...Lyrics were ok, but flow sucked...

Honest feed

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Aight.. This was a OK Track but with that said needs alot of work, Your Quality is Pretty bad, and yah sound like your reading it, Your voice is too mono-Tone, Needs some more emotion, But Yah Lyrics are good, yah had some tight lines in there, Just Touch it Up and it could have potential to be a really good track...

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fuck you

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i forgot who used this beat i think its destiny

Quality is weak ass fuck....learn what metas are you only had two...verses were ok you tryed to come hard and failed....hook is weak and why try to sound like eminem and drop the Tupac sample....ya flow is way off elevate kid

sound like em??????????? u gotA BE fuckin kliddin............


i don't even like emenim....and 2 meta's....come on man,it dont have to use the word "like" to be a meta,....every other punch i hit was a meta u stupid fuck.....do me a favor and read and take some class's b4 u speak again

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HELLLZ YEEAHH !!!!

I think this would have been dope as fuck if you put it to a slower beat. That would have let us hear your lines word for word. You might have benefitted from cutting a word or 2 from your lines. I know I should probably be the last one to say that, but it would really help ™

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