Cuz it's somethign you gonna sleep on...but fuck it I'm bored so

I slap the spectaors witha dose of insomnia
open the flood gates and expose the sheer rhymin' of../
a prodical mind, my phnemonal grind is credit
to edit the dept of days used to pay dues/ get at me...
My CD of fine line of rhyme is just 5.99..(plug)...
tap into energy of sublime wine of grime/
cloth in the game with the fit pro makes...
turn around and make profit, you hope I fail for YOUR sake/
Cuz your dimise is your dispise, you mad I excell, hater?
my ego equals my dick size......I wear Magnaum XL, playa/
you gas my energy to keep the dope lines comin'
and lay it down on the track likeJon Drummond /
And I would carry a beem of light but my eyes never have seen the like
even the best of my marit to carry it has been decived by life/..
you follow me?..no really, follow me, I'm misery- got company?
so deeply envovled in my infamy it's a trip to see God run from me/

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I LIKED THIS IF YOU WANT THERE IS A SLOT FOR YOU IN ORDO ABACHO GET AT ME PM

nice drop



sick intro, great flow and everything, keep droppin

Thanks for the feedback..rest of ya'll gimme some mo'....

Return the favor when I can.....

Two

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Nigga...no words is needed. That was just fire, right there..pure cocaine shit. Keep doing ya thang, although, since I'm muslim I ain't like the last line but whatever. It was tight as shit, and don't even dare to ever ask to battle me cuz it's gon be an outright "no". I don't take embarrassment well. Holla back, youngin'. (ooooh, ooooooooh).

^^^ AIight thats a good look right there from the Illadelph...
No offence to anybody who is religous on that last line, and I meant no disrespect to God, just artistisic expression.....

Scream back at ya boi with feed back

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I feel what you meant, don't worry bout it, noone really gon' take that serious...
yo man, this was cool... just straight spittin', I be feeling rhymes like this... I felt the first few lines the most
-1-

^^Aiight then, thanks for the look. 'Bout to go pound my boyz in some Madden so I'm out....speak ya mind peeps

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You came with an on the edge style with this piece. And on the most, you pulled it off. At times tailed off i felt elaborating with differing levels (which can sometimes come off well, but not here).

I liked the Jon Drummond reference, but it didn't really work too much for me. It had no real effect.

Nonetheless, a very nice read.

..resp...

^^Thanks, yhea I see some poeple noticed I started off deep, then mid-verse I decided to tail off on vocab just for the sake of mass appeal, yaknow..anyhow good look on your view

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shit wuz hot and ill...............tight vocab........good wordplay.............overall it wuz tight and insane..............blah!!!!1ne

^^^Yes Sir! I try to be dope, my man....I try....

Uppin a couple more times then I'll fall back.......

So get wit this right 'chea poeples..

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"I slap the spectaors witha dose of insomnia
open the flood gates and expose the sheer rhymin' of../
a prodical mind, my phnemonal grind is credit
to edit the dept of days used to pay dues"

yeah, I agree, it was a pretty tight intro.. I liked the flowing of the second line into the third..

it was an interesting style and concept which always gets props in almost any rapping community, so I was feelin' the expression.

I think the whole thing about money in the early parts to the middle was a bit played out and could have been a bit more diverse, but it was alright.

I think that the magnum line and a bit after were some pretty good lines, but I think misplaced in the piece and sort of took away from the concept.. don't get me wrong, they were fine and all, but it just seemed like the wrong place for them.

The flow througout was good and there was obvious experience throughout the lines because it showed good flow through different methods.

Overall, this was a good drop with a pretty tight conception for the most part..

peace,

-Ie