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Old 05-06-05, 03:50 PM   #1
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Old 05-07-05, 02:19 AM   #2
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this really is some emotional shit...you show a lot of emotion in it....this is how i feel about shit....i really like this....but nothing i didn't expect you always come emotional and i love it....lol i think i feel a song comin on from this....this is the best i heard out of you...so far....keep droppin man stay up
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Old 05-07-05, 02:21 AM   #3
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Old 05-07-05, 12:16 PM   #4
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looking for best song of the week.

listeningooh.. very nice beat.. i like it.. lol...

your quality is okay.. not great.. not bad.. the delivery is okay.. your flow is pretty good.. lyrics are good.. but sometimes its hard to understand your lyrics..

chorus: Chorus is pretty nice.. but show more emotion on that part.. but very creative on the chorus..

basiclly the songs good.. just have way better quality.. and show more emotion.. well your lyrics have good emotion... its just your voice that doesn't show much emotion.. it sounds like your just reading of your lyrics man.. next time try to remeber it.. well i may be wrong.. hopefully i ain't.. cuz if u did remember it?? oh man that ain't good lol
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Old 05-07-05, 12:34 PM   #5
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looking for best song of the week.

listeningooh.. very nice beat.. i like it.. lol...

your quality is okay.. not great.. not bad.. the delivery is okay.. your flow is pretty good.. lyrics are good.. but sometimes its hard to understand your lyrics..

chorus: Chorus is pretty nice.. but show more emotion on that part.. but very creative on the chorus..

basiclly the songs good.. just have way better quality.. and show more emotion.. well your lyrics have good emotion... its just your voice that doesn't show much emotion.. it sounds like your just reading of your lyrics man.. next time try to remeber it.. well i may be wrong.. hopefully i ain't.. cuz if u did remember it?? oh man that ain't good lol
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That's it...I'm going to go buy a new fuckin' mic today, cause my stick mic doesn't pick up everything in my voice...but thanks all....uppin'...
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Old 05-07-05, 12:53 PM   #6
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i was kinda hopin you would rerurn the favor since no one else leaves feed on my audios
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Old 05-07-05, 01:51 PM   #7
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Quality is ehhh is aight, could been betta, chorus u could it make it more catchy cuz chorus is the most important thang in a song it catches the listener....

verse was str8 flow on and off i liked the 2nd verse betta.......ok dawg try to do less sybles cuz u kinda strugglin wit long sentences.....try to shorten it up. it will help trust me i had the same problem this was aight.....i exprected lil betta from ya fam
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Old 05-07-05, 08:53 PM   #8
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i was kinda hopin you would rerurn the favor since no one else leaves feed on my audios


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Old 05-10-05, 03:23 PM   #9
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A'ight uppin' for some more feed....
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i liked the beat and intro, flow is a lil betta but u still need work, seems to forced or fake
just spit like how u would wifout a mic, sometimes when u step to the mic u may try to hard..
lyrics are ight, nothing CRAZY, quailty is ight, chorus is ok, i see where u going wif it
overall 6.6/10
flow needs help and presence
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Old 05-11-05, 12:19 AM   #11
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Uppin'....favors will be returned....
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Old 05-11-05, 12:28 AM   #12
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quality is good flow as well on this story is decent here not great emotion is good also you should talk more on one thing for better imagery on this and use better vocab sun other then that decent trak
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