Something i just wrote yesterday...........came out aight...i think..lol

MARRIED COUPLE SAY:

SEX IS A TEMPTATION
CAUSED BY A SENSATION
WHEN A MAN PUTS HIS DICTATION
IN A WOMANS VENTILATION
DO YOU GET MY CONVERSATION?
OR DO YOU NEED A DEMONSTRATION? ...

I SAY:

SKY IS BLUE
WATER IS WET
I'LL MAKE YOU CUM
I'LL MAKE YOU SWEAT
PRESSED AGAINST MY BODY
MOVIN UP AND DOWN
SLOWLY BUT FIRMLY
BABY WE WILL MOVE THE GROUND

FEMALES SAY:

SEX IS EVIL
SEX IS A GAME
ONE NIGHT OF PASSION
NINE MONTHS OF PAIN
BABYS A BASTARD
FATHERS A GIT
ALL BECAUSE
THE FUCKING CONDOM SPLIT! ...hahaha

NEGGAZ SAY:

ROSES ARE RED
GRASS IS GREEN
BABY OPEN YOUR LEGS
AND I'LL FILL
YOU WITH CREAM

FREAKY GURLS SAY:

SEX IS GOOD
SEX IS FINE
69
OR DOGGY STYLE
JUST FOR FUN
OR GETTING PAID
EVERYONE LIKES
GETTING LAYED
SO IF U WANT ME IN YO BALL SACK
BROTHA LICK YO LIPZ AN HOLLA BACK


YO this kinda FUNNY BUT HOLLA C WHAT YA"LL THINK

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erm...are you a virgin?!...nah only kidding...

...this was simple, very simple...i could see what you were trying to do....use humour to put through a serious point...

...but it was too blunt at times, not enough edge...sounded too simple, not enough complexity...you need a bit of both if you are to make a 'satire' kind piece work...or at a lot of the first...

...still, has some sort of value to it...some of the points are there to see...but it just doesn't seem 'biting' enough...not enough edge...

....respect...

At first I laughed at this, then I read it again........then I laughed again. But for real, I understand what u were trying to do. You are right tho, keep writtin'


Stay Up

funny yet decent aight holla bak 1

A complete lack of respect for the unity of two lovers. I'll be honest with you, I did not like this peace one bit. I'm sorry.

~Shalom~

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Originally posted by Bruklor Nec is just dumb

I'm taking that as a compliment.

i dont think you wrote that homie....ive seen this in an email man...not tryin to get on ya parade o hate on you o nothin...but this is straight bit homie

SEX IS A TEMPTATION
CAUSED BY A SENSATION
WHEN A MAN PUTS HIS DICTATION
IN A WOMANS VENTILATION
DO YOU GET MY CONVERSATION?
OR DO YOU NEED A DEMONSTRATION? ...
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ROSES ARE RED
GRASS IS GREEN
BABY OPEN YOUR LEGS
AND I'LL FILL
YOU WITH CREAM

FREAKY GURLS SAY:

SEX IS GOOD
SEX IS FINE
69
OR DOGGY STYLE
JUST FOR FUN
OR GETTING PAID
EVERYONE LIKES
GETTING LAYED
SO IF U WANT ME IN YO BALL SACK
BROTHA LICK YO LIPZ AN HOLLA BACK

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RN Vs RB WAR!!....yr 2000...vet~~YEA I SAID VET!! WHAT YOU WANT ME TO PROVE IT? STEP THEN YOU FUCKING HOMO'S

Can you prove that? Have you got the e-mail.

If yes, hit me up on PM.

YES LIKE HE SAID PROVE??? YO SOME ENJOYED SOME DIDN'T ENJOY IT NA'MEAN...EVERONE GOT THEIR TASTE...AM NOT HATING OR NOR DISRESPECTING ANY I KNOW THIS WAS TOO SIMPLISTIC...BUT AM ON MY LEARNIN PHASE..OK.....


MAD I KNOW U AIN'T HATING NA'MEAN....BUT IF YOU GOT A PROVE HOLLA CAUSE I WANT TO SEE IT ......

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dont trip playa...nothin against ya

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RN Vs RB WAR!!....yr 2000...vet~~YEA I SAID VET!! WHAT YOU WANT ME TO PROVE IT? STEP THEN YOU FUCKING HOMO'S

yeah I heard the first part of that in 6th grade ma man... sorry but you got caught.... I can't prove anything but I DO know he didn't write that first part, never heard the parts after that though, maybe they were original

AIGHT playa's if ya'll say so......ya'll might have seen it somehwere witout proven but i did not bit nor copy i did it my way like ever1 seen it maybe the top might being used somewhere but it doesn't mean a brotha can't come up wit that kinda lines.... i rest my case...........

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I'm consulting some people about what to do. Seeing as two people have said they have seen it before. I don't think that's enough.

So i'm going to try and see whether anyone else has seen it before. But i'll wait to see what the other mods and super mods (and possible admin) says...

...no hate, just doing my 'job' (damn, i sound like a bloody traffic warden or something..)...

LOL, I have seen that too. You did change a few words though to make it not so obvious.. I guess. But one of my friends had basically the exact same thing in his AIM profile.

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