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09-15-05, 03:56 PM | #1 | ||||
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"A Hood Prayer" - Intermental
IP: EAF4 A2E8
Check this out recorded today also, called Hood Prayer
second track: a hood vibe www.soundclick.com/intermental 2nd track http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=208197 http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=207948
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09-15-05, 05:11 PM | #2 | |||||
a.k.a Young Franchize
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IP: 9888 06CF
What up? It's the kid Young Franchize. I peeped ya track and... Lyrics are good, but you just need to work on ya delivery. Sometimes too many words were in a line and you rushed, Ya digg? So just work on that homey... Im out \\uNo//
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09-15-05, 05:15 PM | #3 | ||||
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IP: 015B 5712
Ite thanks man, you got a soundclick?
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09-15-05, 05:27 PM | #4 | |||||
a.k.a Young Franchize
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IP: 9888 06CF
ya man... www.soundclick.com/yungfranchize
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09-16-05, 04:37 PM | #5 | ||||
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IP: BFE5 23C3
Yo uppin this hurr/////////
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09-16-05, 04:51 PM | #6 | |||||||
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IP: 0328 C942
dont like this beat... your mic is extremely staticy, yeah your flow needs work, sum of your lines are too long n others too shorts... presence lacks, cos of this your delivery is ass(sorry if i sound harsh) lyrics are ok, nothing special but served a purpose... jus keep practicing man. safe.. RTF on the heist and/or tony green diss(links in sig)
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09-17-05, 06:20 AM | #7 | |||
OYD
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IP: 1ADC A69C
I agree with Franchise, sometimes, you put too many words in one line...That's either delivery or lyrics...u can go back and rewrite it to fit better, or devise a way to flow it to fit better...ur choice
I like ur voice on here...it fits the beat well...and I like the theme of it I think ur voice is recognizable Inter, but you're young so it'll probably change some...So, I think you should really develop a trademark flow style or technique in how you deliver your lyrics so that you'll remain recognizable... until then...keep elevatin...ur comin up...jus work on that delivery and/or lyrics in certain lines not a bad track dawg 1 |
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09-17-05, 09:34 AM | #8 | ||||
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IP: 9909 F383
Thanks man ill work on that.....ill wait to get my own recogonizable flow cos as you said, im quite young so my voice will change (hopefully for the better)
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