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12-14-03, 05:11 PM | #1 | |||||||
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Been through loves most aggresive anger I'll always love u its kinda tough being a romantic gangsta I sit down in this harsh word to think about Loves lessons, love is neither aggressive nore jeaolous, u and my son are my greatest possesions Damn its kinda sad how i lost my boo, but baby girl 3 words describe how I feel "I-LOVE-YOU" some quick short poetry keystyle
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12-14-03, 05:16 PM | #2 | |||||||
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short but still sweet.. i think u should keep it goin it'd prob be pretty decent..simple but nice structure..u could improve the vocab tho...keep it goin kid..i like this..lata..
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12-14-03, 05:49 PM | #3 | |||||||
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yea i did this in couple minutez and i just posted is just a lil piece thnx for the feedback resp.
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12-15-03, 07:32 PM | #4 | |||||||
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this was short and simple. a pure vent, made of emotions and not much else. with a piece layed down so simple and straight forward theres not much one can say on them. them message was simple, but strong, and i felt you did a good job showing why u feel that way. it would be a good piece to add on and expand.
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12-16-03, 11:13 AM | #5 | |||||||
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thnx........
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12-16-03, 12:20 PM | #6 | ||||||
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it was straight cuz but it was a lil short
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