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09-26-05, 11:36 AM
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C.hristopher S.ean D.abatos
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Ysdat VS spektikul
IP: E209 CF04
Verbal Emotions IV
Check in's are due 2 days after the battles are made. (Wednesday) Verses are due 2 days after the check in date. (Friday) Every participant has 2 extensions they can use. Each good for 1-2 days. Voting goes to Sunday at 6 PM EST/ 2 PM PST. Line limit is 20-50 lines. Every participant must vote on a minimum of 3 battles. Please vote on battles that don't have a lot of votes, it doesn't do any good if a battle with 10 votes gets another while one battle has under 2 votes. Topic: Counter Clock Wise REMEMBER! IF YOU NO SHOW THEN YOUR POSTS WILL BE CUT IN HALF! Good luck 
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09-26-05, 02:40 PM
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The Original Half Ass King
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IP: 7C6D 1B8D
*Looks at Ysdat*
*Swallows* GL homie............................. |
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09-27-05, 03:51 AM
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IP: F019 583F
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*Looks down at Spektikul* *Pulls up pants* |
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09-27-05, 05:48 AM
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Whys That?
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IP: 5285 DC82
check.
nice topic  g,luck bro. Last edited by Ysdat : 09-27-05 at 06:02 AM. |
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09-27-05, 02:14 PM
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C.hristopher S.ean D.abatos
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IP: E209 CF04
lol sorry.. for topic.. if ya wanna change jst talk to each other bout changing topic
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09-28-05, 01:34 AM
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The Original Half Ass King
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IP: 7C6D 1B8D
It really is pretty blah, but I can work with it...
Ummm, hey Dab, Im madd-busy right now yo, Can I drop on Sunday? (2 day extention) |
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09-28-05, 10:14 AM
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C.hristopher S.ean D.abatos
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IP: F8F5 C3DE
yeah....... go ahead...........
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10-01-05, 05:00 AM
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Whys That?
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IP: 5285 DC82
Ill take that extension aswell.
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10-01-05, 02:04 PM
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C.hristopher S.ean D.abatos
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IP: F8F5 C3DE
wow... everyone is dropping late.. argh.. fine..
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10-01-05, 06:49 PM
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Whys That?
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IP: 5285 DC82
ok .
Last edited by Ysdat : 10-02-05 at 12:12 AM. |
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10-02-05, 03:38 PM
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The Original Half Ass King
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IP: 7C6D 1B8D
Counter Clockwise If you could travel through time, with a single purpose and cause Would you re-live all the good times, or be reversin the flaws Erase mistakes that you made, while adding in a correction And see the hands on the clock, turn counter clockwise direction Could make things better or worse, it all depends what you say Might even alter reflections, through mirrors you see today With every difference you make, it really don’t matter how Everything that you change, could change your everything now Kiss that girl that you liked, the last slow dance at the prom Fix decisions you made, because you knew they were wrong Shoot the winning basket and help your team in becoming the best Take all of your books home, and actually study for tests Think that changing these things, will make your life become great Cause every road that you choose to follow is deciding your fate Put your all priorities first, and imagine where you could be Don’t let a girl distance dreams; theres always fish in the sea Live your life to the fullest, and take your time at the start Teen years will build who you are, don’t let your world fall apart You gotta set the bar high, accomplish goals of your own Make your reality a novel, which chapters up till you’ve grown Create a name for yourself, always be heard and make a stand Become a leader for others, while being all that you can If I could turn back the clock, I wouldn’t change up a minute Cause then my girl and my friends prolly wouldn’t even be in it Wouldn’t be going to college, and forget anywhere far Couldn’t do things I enjoy, would never own my own car I now have all that I want; my choices made were all good Do you have everything right now, you know you possibly could What kind of things would you change, if you got a couple of tries Think what you’d be like right now, if you travelled counter clockwise |
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10-02-05, 03:43 PM
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The Original Half Ass King
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IP: 7C6D 1B8D
I got some inspiration this morning so I just went with it and wrote...^
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10-03-05, 01:42 AM
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Whys That?
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IP: 5285 DC82
Counter clockwise
Saying Goodbye Lid closed,residue tears run up her face into a lady's innocent eye's maple stained coffin carried backwards from the church by 6 vigilant guys thick crys dry up ,flower petals re-attach to a glistening rose A family get up off there knees procceed to the door then blisfully froze gibberish words stream from the radios out of time speakers clouds retract rain drops towards the sky,virgin girls hand graspfully reaches as the coffin is carried rhythmiclly to gods black satin hurst wood tomb placed inside,as the devil laced the ride in reverse Death Blood leaks into my body like leaches contaminate my vains Desperate word's are yelled "here of out get" but one guy remains removing the viscous chrome plated knife from my misplaced heart voices echo "!!fucker muther die" my visions blurred,decisions pulled apart A kid just burst vivid,laying on his chest he launches back up to his feet couragously I here a yell "guy out watch" as a car speeds down the street it swerves dramatically crazy a round the corner out of site I put the mail in the letter box walk back inside...... ................ "tonight out go should I maybe...I turn on the light Birth Mother hands me back to the docter ambilical cord re-connected carfully wipes me with a blood stricken towl,leaving me vaginal infected when all of a sudden the wall clock burst's open,I witness a hurst chocken Paranoid visions of some what de-ja-vu cenarios of my death provoken The time reforms visual into a grandfather clock's spoken voice un-glad its a guy carrying a coffin he say's............ ...................... " damn I didnt think Ysdat would die from getting stabbed" Last edited by Ysdat : 10-03-05 at 02:17 AM. |
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10-03-05, 02:05 AM
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A Reflection Of The Past
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IP: 2029 97B3
whmmmm
emotion: both did pretty good here,but im going to give ysdat the edge in this area do to i felt some areas in his more the spects imagery: was a tie, both did pretty good expressing they're selve and getting to poitn across. format/structure: pretty good, but id say spektikul had the more better structure... overall: what seperated you was who can tell a better story,which both came good but spekts peace was alittle more predictable which was ok but less interesting to the reader,ysdat was very nice about life's story being told backwards and it was sad with alotta emotion also....my vote is Ysdat
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10-03-05, 09:42 AM
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The Original Half Ass King
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IP: 4F18 2F6A
Wow Ysdat...
That was a very good piece of work. Well done. Good battle. |
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