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Old 11-08-05, 08:14 PM   #1
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Diamonds in the Rough
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a new track I did. obviously



Diamond in the Rough

When I made it I wanted to show how amongst the bullshit where I live, and the bullshit I go through I still shine. I wanted to take sort of a break to my usual GANGSTA sound, y'know? My boy T West made the beat.


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http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=213633
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=213854
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=213780
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=213732

*laughs at Hopesfall and Mimesis*
should'nt have gave me the beat, foo!
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If you do kegel excercises, you would be able to do something similar without having to hold your tip shut with your hand. After you've been doing them, hold off ejaculating as long as you can to really let the pressure build and then aim for your girlfriend's eye and let 'er rip.. You might get lucky and shoot her eye out. That's probably exaggerating it a bit, but it will still be hilarious
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Old 11-09-05, 01:33 PM   #2
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upp'n for feedback.
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If you do kegel excercises, you would be able to do something similar without having to hold your tip shut with your hand. After you've been doing them, hold off ejaculating as long as you can to really let the pressure build and then aim for your girlfriend's eye and let 'er rip.. You might get lucky and shoot her eye out. That's probably exaggerating it a bit, but it will still be hilarious
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Old 11-09-05, 02:53 PM   #3
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Listening...

Beat starts...gawd damn everybody uses sample beats these days..it's getting tiresome. Anyway...verse comes in, decent quality...wasn't feelin the flow honestly, but it works, it's on beat at least...lyrics are coo...though I don't think they suited the beat.

Decnt track keep droppin.
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Old 11-09-05, 03:00 PM   #4
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damn fa real?
I aint even know other people had used this beat.
I wouldnt have used it if I knew it was kinda played.
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If you do kegel excercises, you would be able to do something similar without having to hold your tip shut with your hand. After you've been doing them, hold off ejaculating as long as you can to really let the pressure build and then aim for your girlfriend's eye and let 'er rip.. You might get lucky and shoot her eye out. That's probably exaggerating it a bit, but it will still be hilarious
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Old 11-09-05, 04:48 PM   #5
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I thought is was all well rounded...the line with internet was tight...go overall flow...i liked it

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Old 11-09-05, 05:16 PM   #6
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I Like The Beat But Its Familiar.....Meh


Flow-Its Koo Needs A Lil More Twists In It Ya Know?

Delivery-GOod

Presence-GOod Presenting Yourself On The Mic

Lyrics Seem Good Need to Put Volume Up A lIl(My Speakers R Shit)

Overall Good Track 7/10
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Old 11-09-05, 10:42 PM   #7
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aiight beat is coo. Ain't really like much. kanye type shit wit voices.

You come in nice. nice flow... vocals could be upped a lil. lol for a lil while you had kanye type flow, or you sound like him a lil. iunno =/ lol but vocals, yea, need to be upped. can't understand some parts. but flow I really liked dude. emotion coo. nice lyrics and shit. beat actually ain't bad. llol really, like Kanye type delivery fo reel. lol

but yea, man this def better then last shit i heard. nice shit man. liked this. good listen man. 8.5/10........

RTF on my run it track. lol
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Old 11-10-05, 02:27 PM   #8
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If you do kegel excercises, you would be able to do something similar without having to hold your tip shut with your hand. After you've been doing them, hold off ejaculating as long as you can to really let the pressure build and then aim for your girlfriend's eye and let 'er rip.. You might get lucky and shoot her eye out. That's probably exaggerating it a bit, but it will still be hilarious
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Old 11-12-05, 12:35 AM   #9
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I already told you, I didn't like ya flow in this shit, some times it seem liek you aint rhyme to it...but you had that ill ass line that I keep saying...

"Wonder why I ain't a winner yet/Maybe cuz I spend too much time on the internet"

That shit was too hot...

You had some hot lines that you coulda made better if ya flow was on point you bitch ass bitch.

I should Sprite REMIX! it.
Rearrange the lines son, this beat toooo hot.
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Old 11-12-05, 11:49 AM   #10
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ya that line that pop lotty said was ill that was nice, flow is okkkk could be better beat sounds good and vocals good
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Can I atleast get to the 2nd page, geez
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If you do kegel excercises, you would be able to do something similar without having to hold your tip shut with your hand. After you've been doing them, hold off ejaculating as long as you can to really let the pressure build and then aim for your girlfriend's eye and let 'er rip.. You might get lucky and shoot her eye out. That's probably exaggerating it a bit, but it will still be hilarious
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Old 11-12-05, 09:18 PM   #12
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beat is ass... too much goin on so its sounds all cluttered.. i dont like ur flow.. very simple and repetitive and at times too stop starty.. lyrics are simple... delivery is ok.... sounds awkward at times... dont like hook... ye not feelin it... too much sounds wrong for me to enjoy it at all
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Old 11-12-05, 09:28 PM   #13
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shut yo fat hatin ass up.
this song is better than ANYTHING you have EVER done related to rap.
and you can talk about doin shows all you want, but the proof is in the songs, YOU SUCK!
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If you do kegel excercises, you would be able to do something similar without having to hold your tip shut with your hand. After you've been doing them, hold off ejaculating as long as you can to really let the pressure build and then aim for your girlfriend's eye and let 'er rip.. You might get lucky and shoot her eye out. That's probably exaggerating it a bit, but it will still be hilarious
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in your opinion.... more ppl say im dope than say im wack... and i never let beef get in the way of wat i like about a song... atleast im constructive in wat i say sucks unlike u... and u have the nerve to say i hate???? faggot
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in your opinion.... more ppl say im dope than say im wack... and i never let beef get in the way of wat i like about a song... atleast im constructive in wat i say sucks unlike u... and u have the nerve to say i hate???? faggot

More people lie to you then anything, then.
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If you do kegel excercises, you would be able to do something similar without having to hold your tip shut with your hand. After you've been doing them, hold off ejaculating as long as you can to really let the pressure build and then aim for your girlfriend's eye and let 'er rip.. You might get lucky and shoot her eye out. That's probably exaggerating it a bit, but it will still be hilarious
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