(this rhyme was easy, basically I just desribed Jay-Z, biggie, nas, eminem and myself and maybe you, now let's see if you like it



If you nice you don't write at all
Flows are on call
You never studder or pause
Audience left in awe
When seen a freestyle is requested
Opponents corrected
Punchlines connected with perfection
Also a hidden lesson
defying doubt is your proffesion
During a battle you get close
I can see the hair in your nose
eyelids wide and froze
at school lunchtime is a hip-hop show
but we aint talking hip-hop as you know
we talking about emcees face to face in lyrical rage
It's all freestyle no time to read off a page
Nice flows are called written
Tight flows are called bitten
It certain
when you open your mouth its curtains
your props deservin
You aint just cursin
when you spit to hear it is worth it
In fact it's perfect

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Biggie was always better than Pac, ready to die vs tupacolypse now which was better

hmmmm...not so sure about this peice...lines seemed short...and it was short. I didnt find a meaning to this peice. You had some good wordplay throuhout this peice and the idea was allright. Decent peice i guess
hit this up
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=114704

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Corrupted Visions

i want yall to reply.....whether it's hate...a diss... or it's help... but reply yall

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Biggie was always better than Pac, ready to die vs tupacolypse now which was better

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HARRY R.I.P
1940 - 2002

In Respect

3 replies is fine

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Biggie was always better than Pac, ready to die vs tupacolypse now which was better

This was alright i thought.....lines were kinda short though lol....try making your lines a little longer though so you can make it more complex....the content was alright in this....vocab was alright i thought....overall a alright piece...keep at it.