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Old 06-10-07, 02:02 PM   #1
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The Worlds Demise

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The Worlds Demise
I walk alone
out of my house a dark place
broken windows a brick tossed
is all the memories of this hate!
I cross the boardwalk
and look up to have a hot spring across my face
all i get is the darkness of clouds
for no Sun will shine in our fate
demise I wonder I feel the wind
breezy im torn up inside
feelings are forgotten,hateful relationships are made
jumps and muggings,fatal stabbings,murders and police
we were suppost to elevate and move on
but not with these character traits
I no longer kill but I should of never lived
demise and power the smell of envy overtakes my will
i no longer stand I collaps to a sound
a clap across the rotatating sircumfrence of the world
the waters of rivers,take me in I no longer breathe
a breath of life,life to cry,living is a synonym to die


To be Continued
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Old 06-14-07, 03:49 PM   #2
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good short written it was deep....deep in thought..... ~1~
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Old 07-04-07, 03:13 PM   #3
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this was good mang. i liked your way of writin this. favorite line-all i get is the darkness of clouds
for no Sun will shine in our fate
thats deep mang...
if u get the chance peep mine n give me sum constructive criticism, since im new to this
angel of mine-deluzional
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Old 07-24-07, 05:56 PM   #4
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I like it better then sum but still has a lil bit of choppy ness in it and i lose track! But it was really deep!
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