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07-19-07, 12:14 PM
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IP: D49E 6F7F
Tonight I lack the strength to even move,
When you walked, now watch me die For I know this is harder for you, For love has let you down The road ahead is lined with broken dreams, So walk, walk on by And I failed to give you everything you need, For the fears, behind your eyes When I can't feel you, I'm not alright, I'm not alright, When I can't heal you, I'm not alright, I'm not alright Jesus as you throw me on the rocks, For love I left your side For I believed in love and beauty's whiles, Where heaven shone from her eyes Tell me that it wasn't all for naught, It's such a waste now, It's such a waste now c'mon I know your scared but baby don't you hide, It's such a waste, We'll stand alone now, we'll make it somehow
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07-23-07, 11:51 PM
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IP: 233C 41D5
it seams like you had two different thoughts like your talkin abought god then a girl? I kinda lost wherer this was going but it wasnt bad
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07-24-07, 03:29 PM
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Banned: Cheating
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IP: DB1C 4B69
This was tight!
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07-24-07, 05:53 PM
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IP: DB1C 4B69
IDK wtf u thinkin here its cool but kinda goin 2 diff ways!
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07-29-07, 04:05 AM
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IP: D657 40A2
it was ok...
keep to one thing though |
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07-29-07, 11:15 PM
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IP: A475 1FCF
this was a nice read... emotional and it was down to the last drop of interesting though at times i felt like you were a bit jagged about this and didnt know what else to say but otherwise this was a nice drop man... keep writing pious
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