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Old 06-02-07, 09:12 PM   #1
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suicidal thoughts

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suicide is tempting if you ever felt lost
der are so many people that need help across
thought that are inside burst in our minds
realising that this life has to be so unkind
it makes no sense why we're here at all
i feel ashamed to breath and even stand tall
things went wrong the years have ran along
your mind has gone what plannet am i on
everythings wrong everythings wrong
losing the fuckin hope to stay strong
long to die tears run down from tired eyes
look at life in dispise who are these guys
people full of lies deciete forgotten lifes
people with rotten lifes and battered wifes
full of pain misory questioning do i live
what is the point anyway even if i did
am i important here we're all the same
lifes a big game we're born and feel shame
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Old 06-03-07, 08:45 PM   #2
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Old 06-10-07, 01:45 PM   #3
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with a name like technique i'd expect there to be far ess mispelled words, step up ur vocab... this is also one of those pieces that are quicly becoming my biggest pet peeve... don't be deep for the sake of being deep, just say what u wanna say, and if it comes that way, so be it... okay conept, but played, try to come more specific and w/ better voc. next time, i have faith in u, keep writing...
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