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you left...come back

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wow, already going for heavyweight... I hope this is a good battle... Good luck Avalon

pz

#2..? hum...


you left..? Come back..? hum... that's the topic..? Let's see what I can do...

This sha'll be good. Can't wait...

Odd topic...But I like it, gotta feeling this will be interesting...

Goodluck Both.

lets see some battlin, some hardcore rappinin, all I need now is some tight ass slappinin.

lol, what a great first post, i can see what to xpect from u now

you left... come back...


Avalon: I love you Tory...


DarkHistory: I love you too Av...


~*~ 2 months later... ~*~


Hi there... damn... I missed you today and how
come back please... and end this dismay right now...
can't believe you went like that... left me stranded
I have no idea... where the fuck you could have landed...
ran away in a flash... shot in the dark... and could I add
pushed away so hard... shot in the heart... stopped pulsin at last...
kissin and huggin... while sentences where hummed and
I never felt this way about a woman... but you left to abrupt and...
if I could take you back and get ya back in my system
I'd listen... push first... ask for no more positions...
no more collisions... I swear I'd be keepin you held tight
you felt right... but... wasn't meant for you to leave that night...
shouldn't have let you go... and now I know the truth
8 weeks later... now you and I can see all the proof...
turned nothing into something and a life of regret
my life is to bet... back and forth we go... mine if finished...
in this life you can't grow... in time I can show
you everything but not know... come back and don't go...
Felt so good... I know I should have stopped and pulled
my hands and your face... should have stopped and pulled...
dna manifested in skin so supple and fresh
I'm buggin this mess ... no longer here from us... tuggin the flesh...
everytime I hear ya name called... I'm mourning
long gone... how you peaced out... and never gave warning...
two old friends... broke up over a broad
that's fucked up right..? Hey yo... that shit was lame dog...
crept in late nights... never left my side
what happen the same night..? guess it was all my pride...
had to stay... now at night I only pray for the best
couldn't run away... had to stay in the flesh...
into dark holes so small and so soft and wet
if my sprem came back to me... she wouldn't be preg-a-nant...


*DarkHistory interupts*

DH: Brandon..! BRANDON!!!

Av: WHAT?!

DH: What are you doing honey..?

Av: Writing... why..?

DH: come and rub my feet...

Av silently: DAMN..! I wish ya ass wouldn't have left...

DH: What..?

Av: Huh..?! nothing... here I come...


THE END...


Now that's classic...

Remember the night you wish you could live again?...
The night that will forever be remembered...
Meet Zack, an 18 year old senior in high school...
This is the story of the night he will never forget...

December 31st 2002, New Year's Eve, this year is almost through/
Jesse and James will be here at eleven then it's off to get more boo's/
Leaving the corner store we're set to party the rest of the night/
A girl named Kristie said I was cute and her pussy was tight/
A few shots later she was lookin better but it was wrong I had just met her/
Friends tell me not to sweat her she wants on my jock but I won't let her/
Before long I can't taste it taking double shots cuz I was wasted/
Took Kristie to the basement, you know the rest... I don't have to say shit/
The rest of the night is a blank, woke up late to find my ass at the bank/
Walked home to the party that sank Jesse said I had too much to drink/
3 months later was a repeat, Kristie showed up first now we're rollin 3 deep/
3 deep?.. I was confused but fuck it the crew showed up now the party's jumpin/
The morning after I was pulled to the side by the bitch from New Year's, she got wide/
Starting it with a fake "hi" then proceeding vaguely with she's pregnant and it's mine/
"You Left the condoms on the shelf, Zack" I asked nicely... "Can I have my Cum Back?"...

"No..."

....damn!

Yo Avalon's verse was deep man, that shit came from the heart, once again, I think it had more of an effect because it was first person. Which I've seen a lot lately, dope verses to bothe, but Avalon gets my vote.

Vote=Avalon

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vote=Avalon

his verse was great really deep and solid in mechanics. also it just didn't look like the other guy really tried too hard it's a shame though cause you expect more from the top guys then this

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and sign up for the battle league would yeah, also show up if your already in the league

These both weren't very impressive...
thought I'd see better.
But that's just me, I'm not a huge fan of strictly storytelling.

Avalon took this though. I little more creative... there was more to it...structure needs some work.
Domains verse seemed rushed... that last line wasn't any good...sorry man.

But I didn't like the whole dialoge thing though by avalon... you have to let your verse speak...

Nice try though.... at least you're thinking.
vote- avalon

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I'm a goblin hooked on rails, stuck drinking ale/ I'll rip the horn out a unicorn and shove it up your fairy tale.

hhhmmmm to say these are the top two battlers in the league this was weak...both lacked multie's and complexity both lacked flow and too many lines seemed forced

avalon won with more creativity even though there was little of it pz

LMAO... I guess...


Philo... honestly you're right... it wasn't impressive... but... I didn't try... don't think D did either...


Nh... I honestly don't think you can flow if you couldn't find it... well let me take that back... it didn't have a "full line syllable type flow" so... oh well... thanks anyway...

avalon.....i can flow lol my online topical battle record is 92-0-2

i been spitting for 5 years and this was far from impressive man im not tryna beef im just being honest