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01-18-05, 07:15 PM | #1 | |||||||
STROBE's Favorite Rapper
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C.A.L.I vs KING~DIPSET
IP: 5671 DBDD
CHECK IN BY FRIDAY OR TOPIC WONT BE GIVEN POEMS DUE BY SUNDAY EDIT YOU LINK WITH AT LEAST 2 OTHER POETRY BATTLES IN THE LEAGUE YOU VOTED ON VOTING ENDS WENSDAY AT 12 EASTERN TIME.NO LINE LENGTH AND DONT WRITE A TOPICAL THIS IS A POETRY LEAGUE I WILL DQ YOU IF YOU WRITE A FUCKING TOPICAL I HATE THAT SHIT ITS NOT POETRY WINNERS RECIEVE 100,000 R.V SORRY NO SHOWS DONT GET PAIED YOU GOTTA ACTUALLY WIN GOOD LUCK TO BOTH
TOPIC: It's Raining Fire
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01-18-05, 07:41 PM | #2 | |||||||
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IP: 5671 DBDD
Check Check Check Good Luch Homie
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01-19-05, 08:08 PM | #3 | |||||
Banned: Cheating
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IP: 0825 899A
Checkity Check Check ..............................
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01-20-05, 11:31 PM | #4 | |||||||
STROBE's Favorite Rapper
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IP: 5671 DBDD
IT'S RAINING FIRE Blood puddles the ground like lakes of cherry ink stains Crumbling buildings fall on children who cross in thier lane A lone scream awakes my dreams into a cold sweat I smell the exhaust and hear the screach of a lone jet I stand yet fall as the ground crumbles beneath me I awake to a soldier pulling away rubble trying to reach me As my vision wavers i see more fire fall and rain on the land Like shattered glass the soldier explodes as he stands With no hand to help i pull myself from the wreckage An explosion knocks me off balance as i fall i reach for his weapon Land flys in all directions like fireworks in a clear night sky And the screams are of misery of those not willing to die Offspring passes in the arms of his mother unable to smile And close by a mother dies in the arms of her child Then it stops and only the shouts of those passing are heard As the buildings like old candles continue to burn Then another screach and the air is thick with the evil And more fire falls and continues to rain on my people Running in all directions yet achieving no distance obtained As we all die and the fire continues to rain.........................
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01-21-05, 12:22 PM | #5 | |||||
Banned: Cheating
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IP: 3240 794D
Its Raining Fire It Burned My flesh But Took ease On My Soul As i Stood Like they Rest, Surpirsed And Uphauled I Never Seen Nothing Like it in my Life Although Ive Been to hell and back in one night I Took a Step Towards the Flaming Streets and I Stuck My Hand out In the In They Falling Heat But Before I could Make my bold Move towards death I Building came tumbling Down in my Foot Steps I took that As a Stumbling block that was Blocking my path I Look out to see the Fire Covering bodies as if they were taking a bath It was A falling Flawless flames as I Stood And watched In Amazement Then I Walked around the rubble and stepped onto the pavement Then I noticed This Was not A Suicidal Thought This was A Stride for the Prize, A press towards the mark A press For freedom Of my soul From this place of walls A Place Of supposed Liberty and Justice For all But I never Seen The Liberty and justice Stood absent when I needed it most it Just Turned away with Passion But this was my time to be Free As I feel to one knee As i Stood i saw The Shackles Being loosed, And the chains undone And My angel Came from The sky And Said Your work here is done |
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01-21-05, 12:34 PM | #6 | ||||
Knock out kings fur life
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IP: EA19 CE95
yea cli erasied my other post if it makes him happy but here is my vote god,
I felt king more on this one he had better emotion his flow sounded good to me and his poem just sounded better no hate CALI. overall KING gets my vote peace. |
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01-22-05, 06:28 AM | #7 | ||||
The Rulers Back
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IP: CDAA 2D0A
pretty good battle here cali took this though um i think by the verses hes more comfortable doin poetry seems to come easy but yea calis verse got me into the story showed emotion an overall it told a story an thats what its all about king dipset you did alright to but i think cali got it...vote-CALI
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01-22-05, 06:46 AM | #8 | ||||
Odi et Amo
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IP: C851 350A
This was a close battle, loved the topic actually.
Cali: your vivid way of describing situations is amazing, I felt as if I was in the middle of it all withnessing what was happening. The emotion was strong to, you made us really feel the chaos,the pain, the struggle... Land flys in all directions like fireworks in a clear night sky And the screams are of misery of those not willing to die ^especially the last line is very nice, just got me thinking about this for a sec... Running in all directions yet achieving no distance obtained As we all die and the fire continues to rain......................... ^your ending was nice to, it was as if you wrote an unfinished poem but I love it because it makes us think what might happen next and such, love that approach King~~Dipset: the emotion was raw in your poem from first line to the last, stayed consistent on that. Had some good imagery but I feel you could've described certain things in a better way. When I look at your vocab, I can see that you found good balance between complex and basic. Good job! Then I noticed This Was not A Suicidal Thought This was A Stride for the Prize, A press towards the mark A press For freedom Of my soul From this place of walls A Place Of supposed Liberty and Justice For all But I never Seen The Liberty and justice Stood absent ^Those lines right here were amazing, loved reading them, had strong message to them... Very close battle but my vote goes to Cali because I was feeling his a little bit more, no hate though...Good job from both of you!
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01-22-05, 05:39 PM | #9 | ||||
Da KiNg Of PwNaGe
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IP: 25E4 9760
Both drops had excellent emotion...I thought Cali took the slight advantage in imagry....but Cali takes this for better story and creativity...King used the same concept as Cali which brought his verse down in my eyes
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01-22-05, 08:52 PM | #10 | |||||
Banned: Cheating
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IP: 3240 794D
wowo People actually Think I did Good LOL well cali remember when I first enetered the legue I couldnt write a good poem if my life depended On it LOL well Im elevating rapidly because my last 3 Battles ive won Has been topicals and I Got One topical In My sig now if yall wanna check that out but um....
Thanx for the voting It will be returned YES YOU DID GOOD I TOLD YOU YOU WERE GOOD NOW DONT FREEPOST AGAIN THIS IS THE SECOND TIME TIME IVE WARNED YOU-C.A.L.I Last edited by C.A.L.I : 01-22-05 at 09:54 PM. |
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01-23-05, 08:27 AM | #11 | |||||
New to RV
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IP: 3037 50B7
First my Fav Lines
Cali: Blood puddles the ground like lakes of cherry ink stains Crumbling buildings fall on children who cross in thier lane King Dipset: But I never Seen The Liberty and justice Stood absent when I needed it most it Just Turned away with Passion Cali had better imagery which made the poem come alive, king dipset yours was like looking through a window, but emotion was better than CALIs. But overall Cali had the most enjoyable poem so : \\//ote = CALI
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01-23-05, 12:07 PM | #12 | |||||||
Banned: Cheating
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IP: 8A1A D0A3
very nice battle
favorite lines from cali Blood puddles the ground like lakes of cherry ink stains Crumbling buildings fall on children who cross in thier lane Running in all directions yet achieving no distance obtained As we all die and the fire continues to rain favorite lines from dipset I took that As a Stumbling block that was Blocking my path I Look out to see the Fire Covering bodies as if they were taking a bath As i Stood i saw The Shackles Being loosed, And the chains undone And My angel Came from The sky And Said Your work here is done vote cali but this was a really close battle |
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01-24-05, 02:45 AM | #13 | |||||
Rastafari Walk Tall
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IP: D18F D5CF
just a formality now......................Dipset
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01-24-05, 06:18 PM | #14 | |||||
Banned: Cheating
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IP: 3240 794D
a Yall I Hope yall Know that this is my New Name ......So When you set up My battles and stuff make sure it be in this name and not King~~Dipset
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01-26-05, 07:58 AM | #15 | |||||||
STROBE's Favorite Rapper
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IP: 5671 DBDD
cali wins closed
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