something I recorded but needs to be re-done.

I'm at best whenever I'm speakin my letters
I was here before the earth, I been speakin forever//
with these words, I'll give you the secrets of weather
the flow is the unit....the beat is the measure//
mathematical pleasure whenever I piece it together
try to stay strong but u can't keep it together//
come to me whenever you wanna see something better
tha rhyme is timeless, I don't ever let my mind slip//
the wisdom of a prophet - with the divine gifts
the soul of a savior - the mind of a tyrant//
the louder my word - the greater the silence
i'll shatter you herbs - ya conversation is nonsense//
I float on the rhythm, of mysticism
there aint no such thing as contructive criticism//
I suffer from the symptom, of cyicims
the illest thoughts I express through my lyricism//

I envy you Vokes, The first few Open Mics I put on this Site received some HARSH, Critizism. But it looks like your Gonna Start of with Some Positive Feed Back..Good Job, I liked it: It was in-depth.
Once you get 20 post, I want you to vote on my battle with Flip

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im gon start wit the pros before the cons on this one

1st: ur flow was DOPE more better than half these textheads on here
i could tell u did this to a beat u didnt just write some random shit down
so major props to that cuz i was feeling that

2nd: ur rhyme scheme was more complex than average
nuthin that really leaves u shocked but it aint kindegardon
so props on that keep elevatin wit that shit man

3rd: now this wasnt anything saying anything really
parts of it really didnt make much sense really
i mean it did but it was real random and shit
it was like u were putting shit together just cuz it rhymed
so work on that a lil more

other than that not bad better than some of these cats
i'd give a 6.5/10 which aint too bad so keep elevating
and RTF on my "hip hops resting place" holla

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I liked the flow, multis, and vocab. I couldnt catch the concept though. Good drop though.6/10

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The only thing to fear is fear itself and fear conquers all!!!!

thatts some nice vocabb in yourr rhyme...and you made it work too so nice shitt

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King of Saint Lou

pretty ghood homeboy....i like ur rhyme scheme and vocab usage....but next time try not to use the some words to end the line on text

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