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08-04-03, 01:29 PM
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bananas bananas bananas
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open mic my first spit
IP: 4500 BAA5
urm it probs real crap but i gotta start some ware
swallow a thesaurus jus to regurgate verbz I bite your sentence jus to spice up your termz Ill build a skyscraper jus to throw you off it An piss on your body from my top floor office You couldnt lock a flow like u could a door with no key You couldnt DROP a flow even if your name was GRAVITY! The odds are on me so its a cert that i beat ya You might as well be in a cell trapped with haniball lector Cuz your FUCKED like a drunk virgin in the back of an Astra.. ....Trapped with an ugly fuck on 100 mil of VIAGRA Ill smoke your crew like a rizla...cum on your lil sister Leave you red raw and painful jus like a titty twister I spit flows with more intensity..... Than that of curries diahorea... when the shit flows from ya fuckin mummys rear!! |
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08-04-03, 01:32 PM
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Tickle My Sloth
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IP: DF45 9C15
Seemed more of a battle verse than an open mic piece in my opinion, flow was pretty good, wordplay was mainly basic but you have potential, work on your vocab a little more, and dont use any punches about Shit / Diarrea, all of those are played my man.
Not a bad first attempt though, you'll need a lot of work before you become dope, but just keep writing and eventually you'll get better. Reply to mine: Wonderful Women. . |
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08-04-03, 03:11 PM
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IP: 1908 5BEC
it was pretty good specaily for a first piece on here cus you dont know what to expect but it was good. it be a good battle verse
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08-04-03, 04:54 PM
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IP: 9BD2 F24F
weak but ok
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08-04-03, 06:07 PM
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IP: 9BD2 F24F
no just weak
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08-04-03, 07:23 PM
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IP: C1DA C961
^^^commin' from a man with the 2 wackest record labelz in the game in his sig... but anywayz...this shit was aiiight...it wasn't great but you got potential...keep doin' ya thing and you gonna get betta dog...don't worry give it a coupla months and you could be ill...
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08-04-03, 09:50 PM
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BANNED As Sampson
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IP: 3C9D F519
This shit is elementary but 4 a 1st spit it is good just keep elevatin nigga
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08-04-03, 10:06 PM
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Registered User
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IP: E0C2 1797
Some nice attempts at punchlines. Try working on multies to get your flow up a little and use some rhyme scheming. Keep writing and elevate....
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08-05-03, 04:51 AM
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bananas bananas bananas
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IP: 4500 BAA5
yo black_soulja
at least i can rap more than 10 lines fuckin prick he gets a vote against he haz a fuckin fit |
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08-05-03, 06:04 AM
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IP: 9B33 081B
it was pretty good a couple of lines didn't really rhyme but not bad for a first spit you remind me of someone can't really think of who....................? anyway keep at it you'll elevate sooner than you think
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08-05-03, 06:18 AM
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IP: 4577 CD9A
yo rico...them pics in ya sig are fuckin' hilarious man...I just had to tell you that shit...
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08-05-03, 06:32 AM
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methtallica
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IP: 3380 B09B
this seemed like a keystyle 2 me,but a solid key though overall.. some bars were fillers here n there but besides that shit it was a decent read yo.. keep at it.
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