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Old 07-25-04, 04:50 PM   #1
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1. L.I 'vs' 8. Percept Shun

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Old 07-25-04, 09:08 PM   #2
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Old 07-25-04, 11:06 PM   #3
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Old 07-28-04, 06:13 PM   #4
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Old 07-29-04, 11:51 PM   #5
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Who invited him here? If theres no herbs in, then who's he?
Guess Karl wanted to be honest when he first named the tourney.
Cause his bars are 'fucking soft', like sex without erections.
Thats why this battle's one sided like the next presidential election.
Your verses straight up ass, like a fat women wearing tight thongs.
Even putting Vodka in party drinks, won't help you make your punch strong.
I could water this herb and watch his skill not even grow.
because L.I. couldn't coin new lines, placing money in pay phones.
You and this career don't match, like nuns being nudists.
....and about as important to rap, as the pope is to budhists.
He's destined to lose this, like cults I'll be choosing his faith, but still.
.....he named himself L.I. just cause he's the exact opposite of I.L. (iLL)
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Old 07-30-04, 11:41 PM   #6
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Set him a near impossible goal of greatness like this is dr. phil...
His name already paints the picture.. how he's still pursuing skill...
Obvious hes an Old RB reject trying to hit it big like that herb Rascal...
But he'll get the same thing.. a nice record but merked by vets wit no hassle...
Ill knife his neck.. as i slice and dice his body, like its a horror movie...
And have him shakin in trama .. like he was Cash Money booty...
Whats the point of him living.. i mean i wouldnt care if this kid died...
Since after i met him.. i understood why people commit suicide...
This kid aint got the nuts.. seriously nothing is matured or grown...
And how could he write deep.. when his voice aint at the tone... (his age...)
Get yah ass out of here.. you aint wanted, and thats the truth...
You just got beat more then dicks of kids of your youth...
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Old 07-31-04, 12:04 AM   #7
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Who invited him here? If theres no herbs in, then who's he?
Guess Karl wanted to be honest when he first named the tourney.
Woo, I love hearing my name. Lol. This was a slick opener; not wack, not a hard punch ... but it works.
Cause his bars are 'fucking soft', like sex without erections.
Thats why this battle's one sided like the next presidential election.
Both lines were odd:
1. You can't have 'intercourse' without an erection. Obviously. I suppose there's numerous sexual things that could be done without it, but let's not get into that right now....
2. I think the presidential election could be closer then you've stated. Again, that's another matter.

All and all, I'm going to overlook this.
Your verses straight up ass, like a fat women wearing tight thongs.
Even putting Vodka in party drinks, won't help you make your punch strong.
Punch-Punch ... The concept is relativly played out, but in this case... it was interesting. Depending on what L.I comes with, this could prove to be a decent bar.
I could water this herb and watch his skill not even grow.
because L.I. couldn't coin new lines, placing money in pay phones.
The herb thing is known to be massivly played. See? The word played pretty much sums it up. These lines would be so much doper back in the day though. Sorry man.
You and this career don't match, like nuns being nudists.
....and about as important to rap, as the pope is to budhists.
Err... I'm not going to say much about this. You may have heard this before, but; Your Punches don't hit hard enough. Most of them show originality, but it's a battle, not an Open Mic. Creativity is good, but it needs to be tied in with punches. How do I know? I've got the same problem. Think about that next time you're writing your verse.
He's destined to lose this, like cults I'll be choosing his faith, but still.
.....he named himself L.I. just cause he's the exact opposite of I.L. (iLL)
Technically, it only spells IL.. LMAO. Just kidding around. I'll give you props for creativity- I know you're thinking. But this was not a hard punch.


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Set him a near impossible goal of greatness like this is dr. phil...
His name already paints the picture.. how he's still pursuing skill...
I believe Percept Shun, refers to perceive rather then pursue. Although, feel free to correct me if I'm wrong.
Obvious hes an Old RB reject trying to hit it big like that herb Rascal...
But he'll get the same thing.. a nice record but merked by vets wit no hassle...
You shouldn't have mentioned you key'd this, cause it appears more obvious in lines like this. Come on L.I, i'm hoping the following get's better
Ill knife his neck.. as i slice and dice his body, like its a horror movie...
And have him shakin in trama .. like he was Cash Money booty...
Lol, better. Keep it up.
Whats the point of him living.. i mean i wouldnt care if this kid died...
Since after i met him.. i understood why people commit suicide...
You're falling off again.
This kid aint got the nuts.. seriously nothing is matured or grown...
And how could he write deep.. when his voice aint at the tone... (his age...)
Lol, okay... finishing stronger...
Get yah ass out of here.. you aint wanted, and thats the truth...
You just got beat more then dicks of kids of your youth...
Worded very awkwordly, and it didn't come off very nice.

Overall, I didn't break down your lines like I did for some of the other battlers. I believe you're a vet here, and you should know what's expected. I strongly felt you half-assed the hell out of this, and you're going to take the loss for it. All your other dick riders can come and vote for you, but I'm not going to.

Probably didn't matter much to you anyway.


Vote- Percept Shun

Edit: This has nothing to do with you beating me. I want to make that very clear, as I just reliazed it now. I think it's obvious I no longer care about that shit. If you've got a real problem, PM me and we'll talk it over.
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Old 07-31-04, 03:32 AM   #8
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Who invited him here? If theres no herbs in, then who's he?
Guess Karl wanted to be honest when he first named the tourney.
^not bad opener...not VERY strong

Cause his bars are 'fucking soft', like sex without erections.
Thats why this battle's one sided like the next presidential election.
top line played & I wasnt really feeling the 2nd part but it was decent.

Your verses straight up ass, like a fat women wearing tight thongs.
Even putting Vodka in party drinks, won't help you make your punch strong.
1st was funny & 2nd like Karl said is played but it was decent.

I could water this herb and watch his skill not even grow.
because L.I. couldn't coin new lines, placing money in pay phones.
liked this alot.

You and this career don't match, like nuns being nudists.
....and about as important to rap, as the pope is to budhists.
nah 2 basic.

He's destined to lose this, like cults I'll be choosing his faith, but still.
.....he named himself L.I. just cause he's the exact opposite of I.L.
I liked that, good & direct.

overall not a bad verse.

Set him a near impossible goal of greatness like this is dr. phil...
His name already paints the picture.. how he's still pursuing skill...
word at what Karl said. This doesnt make sense. Perception is how you see things.

Obvious hes an Old RB reject trying to hit it big like that herb Rascal...
But he'll get the same thing.. a nice record but merked by vets wit no hassle...
haha at Rascal gettin dissed & not even in this. erm 2nd line was basic.

Ill knife his neck.. as i slice and dice his body, like its a horror movie...
And have him shakin in trama .. like he was Cash Money booty...
this made me laugh but i dont like "attack" lines coz ur not makin a punch.

Whats the point of him living.. i mean i wouldnt care if this kid died...
Since after i met him.. i understood why people commit suicide...
wack 4 u

This kid aint got the nuts.. seriously nothing is matured or grown...
And how could he write deep.. when his voice aint at the tone... (his age...)
played but nice flip.

Get yah ass out of here.. you aint wanted, and thats the truth...
You just got beat more then dicks of kids of your youth...
very played.

Vote Percept Shun for a more solid verse
 
Old 07-31-04, 02:15 PM   #9
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Who invited him here? If theres no herbs in, then who's he?
Guess Karl wanted to be honest when he first named the tourney.
ok punch, nothing special
Cause his bars are 'fucking soft', like sex without erections.
Thats why this battle's one sided like the next presidential election.
played
Your verses straight up ass, like a fat women wearing tight thongs.
Even putting Vodka in party drinks, won't help you make your punch strong.
like this punch, lol

I could water this herb and watch his skill not even grow.
because L.I. couldn't coin new lines, placing money in pay phones.
decent punch
You and this career don't match, like nuns being nudists.
....and about as important to rap, as the pope is to budhists.
ehhhhh
He's destined to lose this, like cults I'll be choosing his faith, but still.
.....he named himself L.I. just cause he's the exact opposite of I.L. (iLL)
_____good closer_____________
not your best stuff LI


Set him a near impossible goal of greatness like this is dr. phil...
His name already paints the picture.. how he's still pursuing skill...
no,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,
Obvious hes an Old RB reject trying to hit it big like that herb Rascal...
But he'll get the same thing.. a nice record but merked by vets wit no hassle...
okay punch
Ill knife his neck.. as i slice and dice his body, like its a horror movie...
And have him shakin in trama .. like he was Cash Money booty...
bad,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,
Whats the point of him living.. i mean i wouldnt care if this kid died...
Since after i met him.. i understood why people commit suicide...
okay punch
This kid aint got the nuts.. seriously nothing is matured or grown...
And how could he write deep.. when his voice aint at the tone... (his age...)
blahhhhh
Get yah ass out of here.. you aint wanted, and thats the truth...
You just got beat more then dicks of kids of your youth...
not good

vote-Percept Shun, for better punches and better overall verse.
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Old 07-31-04, 04:15 PM   #10
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LI i've seen u spit a lot harder,n i was expecting u to win this i was kind of disappointed with ur verse....i wasnt feelin it....that cash money line,the closer...those were just really bad....that line with rascal n original was prolly ur best,but it was mostly a personal....
percept shun...i liked the buddist line.....the election line was aight i guess,not the best, the vodka line i've seen similar context...but i think the best was ur closer n the buddist line....u had some ok punches ...li i think he wasnt really trying cuz i seen him come much harder..
imma have to go with percep shun
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Old 08-01-04, 08:53 PM   #11
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Closed.

Li is out & Percept Shun moves on.
 
 


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