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01-29-05, 11:45 AM
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C.hristopher S.ean D.abatos
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Anxiety Vs. BigChase
IP: 7669 3009
Check in's due before tuesday 12 A.M. Pacific Time Verses Due before friday 12 A.M. Pacific Time Line Limit: 20-50 Lines Max First to 3 votes win 3-0 = KO You must vote in 2 other battles or you will not continue on into the next round. Topic: A Child's View (Thanks DQ.)
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01-29-05, 02:57 PM
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Thank You, Come Again
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IP: 1C81 276B
this is bullcrap =)
I said wildcard..wheres my powers..blah I won''t try this round and will be leiminated g/l anx
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01-29-05, 03:22 PM
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C.hristopher S.ean D.abatos
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IP: 7669 3009
This Battle has been Re-Opened
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www.FG-Servers.com Last edited by Dabatos : 01-29-05 at 07:19 PM. |
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01-30-05, 09:59 PM
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IP: 6CB8 12EC
Check..........
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02-03-05, 06:29 PM
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IP: 6CB8 12EC
Yo... This is a story... About my life, growing up... I was a mean kid, nope, i aint never had remorse... It started with my parents bickerin back and forth... My mother on the phone, saying, "I hate this jerk"... Always mad at my dad, when he came home late from work... Too young to understand, how my father and my mother... A married couple, could actually hate each other... My baby brother... He had to go through the same shit... Listening to hatred, and had no toys to play with... Moments of silence were sacred... But rarely happened... Arguements filled the household, we were rarely laughin... I couldnt believe how often, they were aimin to brawl... I loved going to school, just to get away from it all... Takin jabs at each other through me, i hated it... Memories? Nah, my arguing parents tainted it... Got worse, i started to hit shit like a brawler... Then my dad came home with lipstick on his collar... That moment, felt like my whole life dismantled... Being a father means you gotta lead by example... Still young, but aready look at the life i've had... My worst fear is growing up and being like my dad... |
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02-03-05, 06:50 PM
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GG Haterz
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IP: A9DB 3A1E
Wow, Anxiety that was deep. I really like that verse. Your multis were perfectly placed, and your emotion and flow were on cue. Only thing is flow was choppy at some points, other than that, dope. 8/10
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For Anyone Who Wants to Talk to Me  ^^I think this explains my view on gangster rap perfectly. |
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02-03-05, 07:04 PM
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Thank You, Come Again
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IP: 1C81 276B
finaly the topic has been posted....
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02-03-05, 07:29 PM
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GG Haterz
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IP: A9DB 3A1E
Ya I noticed that Daba hadn't posted it, so I did. Sorry it was so late.
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For Anyone Who Wants to Talk to Me ^^I think this explains my view on gangster rap perfectly. |
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02-03-05, 08:08 PM
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Thank You, Come Again
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IP: 1C81 276B
No problem.....
This is very deep...but I didn't try much....10 minute key a child's view, pure and innocent death is even seen with ignorance fragile as the youth's bones secure and tursting outside their homes a gland changes at times, the bodys clock a heat of gold and innocence learns to harden like a rock yet somes views never have the change to change never maturing, the mental growth only to derange as youth grows older they grow sick taking away one's future is what makes them tick manipulating each one with everey scheme replacing every aspirations with a menacing dream the definintion of evil walking among men metaphoricaly snatching the egg from our hens their evil lies within the child's hands it is met forcefully and unwillingly to their demands the pain lasts the child every mintue of the act so vulgar the aching inside wont stop until their laid in the sepulchre as my cheek feels the cold salt I reminisce of the past of the day I was taken from my class
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02-03-05, 09:52 PM
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GG Haterz
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IP: 6AED C9F4
Anxiety, I like your drop. The flow and emotion are really good. The flow was a bit choppy in some parts, but other than that pretty good. Imagery was good too, I can see parents arguing and little kids just watching. Vocab was aight. 8/10
BigChase, good verse for a keystyle, but I didn't feel a lot of emotion, imagery, but I saw depth. Vocab was ok, but overall your lack of work lost it in this one. 7/10 v/Anxiety
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For Anyone Who Wants to Talk to Me ^^I think this explains my view on gangster rap perfectly. |
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02-05-05, 12:58 AM
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IP: 0825 899A
anxiety.......
you didnt have alot of multies.......wasnt very much vocab.....did have good flow.....structer was good....scheme was coo.....like the story......had raw emotion.....I love that  big chase....... you had good multeis not many tho.......you had very good vocab.......good flow....structer was good.....scheme too.......wasnt alot of story.....lacked the emotion u tryed to express.......  v/anxiety
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02-05-05, 02:15 AM
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Life is a Constant Battle
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IP: 2430 2BA8
votin for anxiety
Anxiety- dope drop man came with the multis, the structure and imagry was great. Liked the story the flow was good and the vocab was aight...i liked the drop though dope shit Big Chase- Like you said you basically gave this to him because although you had the components of the topical you lacked emotion, imagry, and other things that would have boosted you in the battle
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02-05-05, 07:37 AM
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Odi et Amo
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IP: 029A 70BC
Anxiety: the strongest aspect of your verse was definately the emotion, so strong and described in such a vivid way. Imagery was nice and I could actually see and hear the screaming and arguements. Was feeling your flow, structure was good and found good balance with your vocab. You always keep it quite simple and yet, you manage to express everything in such a raw way...solid drop!
BigChase: your vocab was more complex but it didn't support the emotion which lacked in your verse. Had your flow on lock and the structure was good, imagery could've been better. It was fairly obvious you didn't put too much effort into it...but overall, it was on okay drop...no hate... Vote goes to Anxiety
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02-05-05, 12:14 PM
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GG Haterz
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IP: 7474 C3B1
Anxiety wins this due to a 3-0 KO. Good job Anxiety.
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