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Old 04-13-09, 11:59 PM   #1
Jay Rose
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286 - On My Own

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leave feed this is only my first mix of it, im looking to improve
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Old 04-14-09, 12:28 AM   #2
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okay..first off the beat.. is pretty ill.
vocals are pretty low..on the hook..
first verse comes in pretty goood..i like the content and flow.
needs a little bit of more emotion...just a little more feeling into it.

ahhh. the hook man. its got a good feel to it...but autotune wouldn't fit this beat..
and that last note is killing it...

send me the beat and hook's words..let me see if i can help you a bit..me or my bud who can sing..
if you want..

otherwise..just needs a little more time into it and im sure it'll come out pretty sick..
you remind me of jin a little..
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Old 05-02-09, 03:11 AM   #3
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pretty dope song.
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