listenin..yah quality aint good...but u got a nice voice...jus got a wrong mixin technique...flow is real dope...nice multis here n there...jus work on the emotion a lil but i think the quality fucks it up....but yeah keep at it..u got a real nice flow..hook is nice too...real catchy...this is pretty hot..if it was mixed right and mastered in a studio this shit wud be on BET....2nd verse is alot much betta nigga....flow is really nice...lyrics are pretty nice..like that pleasure n pain line...we shud collab mayne..holla at me..1

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=221889

cud u rtf to that^^^ plz

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he flows are not bad sounds like over all is good ..just need a new or better mic ... and some production...http://www.soundclick.com/player/si...id=3466822&q=hi

http://www.soundclick.com/player/si...08&q=hi.....not a bad beat ...not my style but it would go with your flows...

Listening...I love this beat man. Sheek is my man...Anyways, emotion is dope. This makes up for the quality. I can tell this is coming from the heart. Honestly, I really wasn't expecting much, but you surprised me bro. Hook is hot...Lyrical wise, this is pretty good, especially for a love song...Sounds like something I could chill and smoke too...Flow is really good man. Overall, solid track man. Only thing you need to work on is quality, which you already know. Good shit man.

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thanks fellas. i'm headin to the studio to re-record this track and i'ma do a sum new tracks and shit and hopefully. get this producer to help me on my mixtape. hopefully everything works out. cuz i already got connects in the music biz. i just need a cd to show b4 anything could happen.

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Knuckels. I got a hell of a hand, u still developin man.//
I'll have you leavin' the ring lookin' like the elephant man.//

shits decent.. quality can be better...

flow and lyrics are mad on point like banks.. "more than a nice but, a girl i can wife up"

liked that line alot hook is nice and smoothe yeah fasho actually feelin this track

second verse.. sped it up a little bit that shit hot

ya fasho kid ya doin ya thing 8/10

hit up my track here we go

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=222268

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good looks man. i appreciate it. but wheres the link to ur track?

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Knuckels. I got a hell of a hand, u still developin man.//
I'll have you leavin' the ring lookin' like the elephant man.//

^^ You down to collab?

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i'd collab wit u, but i still gotta do a collab wit Past Tense. After that we prolly could work sumthin out. 1

by the way. I'm knuckels. I needed a name change. lol

Ight, good beat choice...........

hook kicks in...

your quality needs to fixed badly. I would suggest getting a new mic and an amp to get rid of the "rushing water" in the background. You need more emotion, and the echo is too strong, and makes you sound mono toned.

Verse kicks in
The reverb drowns out your verse. Good topic, but you need to keep your delievery consistent, for instance, the pause doesnt work well. It also, it sounds in a few places that you was reading off of a paper more than concentrating on delivering the verse.

Chorus kicks in....
same as above.

2nd Verse
Better than first, your message was a lot clearer. You started off solid, but started to fall off as the verse continued. Yea, work on delievering a more complex flow, because your sentence structure is too elementary right now. Take the reverbs off your voice, and add dubs instead. I suggest getting better equipment, or get someone to help you manage and manipulate your vocals. But this is an average track.

7/10 - would be a little higher if quality was better.


feed used 2/17 "*The Artist*"

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