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11-27-04, 09:27 AM
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POINT BLANK DISTANCE read it hook me up with some feed
IP: 2CF0 0E03
im about to "open-up shop" in this "open mich drop"//
your tryin to "hop wihtout the hip" im goin straight to the top// pakin more verses in my mainframe then animals on noahs ark// my flow "bites like a shark" lights up night with a spark// a grim stare from me leaves u without your vocal cords// my tracks are the lords "cut u like them double edge swords"// they flow straight to your heart "like cupid and his dart"// wear my brains on my sleeve "like an external body part"// you can see where "my rhymes live" right out in the open// they stream off my brain "like water from the ocean"// i got you chokin holdin your breath holdin your chest// rest i think your stessed your heart just entered cardiac arrest// my rhymes "suffocate u like a giant coke line" a gagger// u cant have a purple heart if my "flows cut it out like a dagger"// quick we need to get u in a ambulance fast// docs gazin at u like u got 3 heads sayin how did he last// his heart is wrangled and mangled looks like he got strangled// from PntBlnkDistnce "i grabbed your soul" and got it tangled// 
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11-27-04, 09:47 AM
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IP: F2B1 8D50
good drop.just one or two lines in there was off but good drop.vocab was good too.work on ur wordplay.7/10.keep em comin'
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11-27-04, 09:48 AM
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IP: 5043 32F4
hmmm good using of multis and metaphores....not bad vocabulary stucture could use a bit more work....but this aint that bad for a intro song...7/10...pretty good for a newbie i say
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11-27-04, 11:02 AM
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IP: B417 DEF0
not bad....
flow good, creativeness decent.. all around preety decent for a noob.... 7.5 outta 10.... |
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11-27-04, 11:13 AM
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IP: 1AF0 6ADD
yo for a first drop this aint to bad... work on your wordplay and metas a bit... structure is good.... all in all this was a good drop for your first attempt...7/10... keep it up!
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11-27-04, 11:42 AM
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IP: 04A1 75C9
aiiiiiight for an newbie dis an good drop nice fam.........work on them meta'z and shit.....vocab is an must fam......fix the struture a lil bit str8in ya lines........but either way dis an good drop fam good shit ish....... 7/10 good drop from an newb
put down an feedback in my open mic "diss to this kid at skool-smoke" thanks mayne i preciated
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