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Old 02-18-08, 09:25 PM   #1
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Fuck Hungry Im starving

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Just getting the studio up and running still need an upgrade in equipment too. Just want a little advice/criticism. The track is Fuck Hungry Im starving.

Leave links so i can return the crit.
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Old 02-18-08, 11:59 PM   #2
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I don't like the sound of the beat.

quality is horrid. you need to learn how to mix better. If I was you i'd wait til I had decent quality til I dropped audio. Your quality can tell how much you wanna make music. Flow sounds robotic and this is boring.

Overall this song is weak. Step it up.
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Old 02-19-08, 12:02 AM   #3
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ok, playing, beat sample came in backwards or someshit. Im feeling this beat.

What have you done to your vocals? they sound untouched akak shit. You need dubs and adlibs aswell as alot of new mixing technics.
Lyrics sound ok, but your so monotone im honestly not even listening. you sound like your flowing on beat.

I think turn your mic down, then let loose, rap from your heart, you sound like your tryna stay loq so people in your house done hear you.

Stay dropping bro, its all about learning and getting better.
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Old 02-19-08, 05:38 AM   #4
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Yeah well this could be a good track, the quality is bad fucked tho......... I was liking the beat, but yeah you need that mic turned down a few touches.
You need to re-spit this when you have the right quality e.t.c but make sure you get out what your trying to say, instead of sounding like your reading from a book in school or suning.
Keep practice'n and shit and your there aight.

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Old 02-20-08, 06:24 PM   #5
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Good looks everybody. Thats what up, niggas came through. Ill drop crit on yall pieces when I get a chance in a few hours or so
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Old 02-22-08, 06:10 AM   #6
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