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Old 08-22-04, 12:16 PM   #1
~Lady Fiya~
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~things people tend to think about but never get answers for~

if it’s all in God’s hand, then the Devil’s a little empty
fallen angel, a betrayal but known to be the most pretty?
like Delilah to Samson, we tend to sleep with enemies..
release secrets, lost the trust of God, “please forgive me”
how many times you make that “mistake” and cry out?!
to the One you so-called love, but suicide spoils ya mouth!
if we die, we live up or down 6 feet where we once began?
we keep images of our flesh, physical turn into ashes again..
the first belief, let’s quarrel @ which religion’s pure gold!
churches divided by saints, fates? promised after-life untold..
askin’ simple questions, complicated un-answers do unfold..
the world hold homeless in shelters, noses lift showin’ levels!
God before damnit, “light curses” sworn to uplift the devil..
we all wonder the thoughts whether (for us) God has a spot
if u don’t believe in either, u STILL end up on his side or not..
painters get quick bucks, draw-up Jesus bluffin’, smokin’ weed
people die in their greed, materials “of the world” is our need..
blood spilled insanity, happens daily people drop like gravity
duck gunshots, smuggling ‘suga-knocks’ blamin' YOU never ME...

things to think about..


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Old 08-22-04, 10:59 PM   #2
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yo, I was feelin' this one. I liked it. Good job.

The only thing bad about it was that the first two lines don't really rhyme. Well it might rhyme when you say it, but for me it don't. But other than that it's dope.

You had nice imagery and stuff. I loved the flow. it was really good. I mean, yo verse looks like a box. haha But yea, lyrics were nice, and really got me thinkin'. I was likin this one, yo. Tight stuff. Keep droppin' pc.

I give it a 9.4/10
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Old 08-22-04, 10:59 PM   #3
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yo, I was feelin' this one. I liked it. Good job.

The only thing bad about it was that the first two lines don't really rhyme. Well it might rhyme when you say it, but for me it don't. But other than that it's dope.

You had nice imagery and stuff. I loved the flow. it was really good. I mean, yo verse looks like a box. haha But yea, lyrics were nice, and really got me thinkin'. I was likin this one, yo. Tight stuff. Keep droppin' pc.

I give it a 9.4/10
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Old 08-22-04, 11:00 PM   #4
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yo, I was feelin' this one. I liked it. Good job.

The only thing bad about it was that the first two lines don't really rhyme. Well it might rhyme when you say it, but for me it don't. But other than that it's dope.

You had nice imagery and stuff. I loved the flow. it was really good. I mean, yo verse looks like a box. haha But yea, lyrics were nice, and really got me thinkin'. I was likin this one, yo. Tight stuff. Keep droppin' pc.

I give it a 9.4/10
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Old 08-23-04, 01:30 PM   #5
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WTF? STupid FAG!!! why you postin' 3 times in a row? dumb fuckin' herb. I should merk fo wannabe MC ass cuz of that. fuckin' bitch

But yea, dope piece. I was feelin' it. Nice shit. hot drop

But damn, Reckless you a fuckin' fag.
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Old 08-23-04, 04:40 PM   #6
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^y'all crazy, thanx fa the feedback both SPuL and L.I., very appreciated.. thanx
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Old 08-23-04, 04:52 PM   #7
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^yo, that wasn't L.I. that was me. L.l. lol
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Old 08-27-04, 05:02 PM   #8
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still, silly^ feedback ppl..., gracias..
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